Honest opinion? I'm a harsh critic haha. But you've asked for it.
I didn't like it.
I got bored with the shots at about :20 second mark, because they're pretty much all the same. Park, baseball field, white sky, park, baseball field, white sky...
and wtf is @ 2:45? lol That's just weird.
A note to the director/filmmaker:
If he is talking about being more successful, then your job as a filmmaker to show that. You need to show that he has what he is talking about. He is using you to promote himself so you have to SHOW us what he is talking about. But so far you just shown a young dude with saggy pants and a green hat rapping about success, but he is dancing by himself in a park and a dock, acting like a huge dork (yep, talking about 2:45), and I simply don't believe that he can do what he talks about.
Take the slider, grab that dude and find a nice place to reshoot (read: create an illusion of what he is). Don't use that park, because it was really lame. But maybe a great looking house or a boat, or somewhere fancy..
Good luck!