critique Looking for critiques of 10 page draft

OrangeMango · Aug 12, 2004

Hi all,

I've just finished the first draft of a short wuxia (martial arts) film I'll be working on in a few months, and I'm looking for one or two people who'd be willing to look it over and offer critiques and such in the next day or so. Just drop me a PM or leave a comment here with your email, and I'll send it on over as a PDF.

Two-sentence synopsis: Guilt-ridden assassin's assigned to take out a priestess who herself was an assassin at one point. He ultimately finds a piece of redemption.

EDIT: Many thanks to Shaw and Poke for their help. No more critiquers needed

Shaw · Aug 12, 2004

Sounds interesting. I'd be willing to look it over for you if you want. You can email me at:

(note this is a redirected address and as such my reply will come from a different account. I've had some people email me only to have my reply blocked!)

OrangeMango · Aug 12, 2004

Awesome, thanks. Email sent! And I'll keep an eye out for a different email reply.

Shaw · Aug 12, 2004

Great got your mail. Will look over this tonight and get back with you sometime tomarrow.

I use a redirected email when posting to fora as I can easily terminate them if I start getting spam

OrangeMango · Aug 12, 2004

Many thanks. I'm looking forward to hearing back from you. Very good idea on the fora thing. I normally just rip apart my email address when making it public. Like, thatwaszen AT gmail DOT com. But I imagine spambots will catch on to that eventually...

Zensteve · Aug 12, 2004

There are a few ways to make it difficult for e-mail harvesters to nab your address.

http://www.seowebsitepromotion.com/obfuscate_email.asp

This lists some of the ways (along with automagical generators), and it's fairly simple to use.

(Not that this has anything to do with your script, so I'll end now)

NicklausLouis · Aug 12, 2004

Send me a copy - pokewowplayer1@hotmail.com

(let me know when you do, so I can fish it out of my Junk Box)

Poke

OrangeMango · Aug 12, 2004

Zen: Thanks for the link! That's a very clever way to garble an email address.

Poke: Have sent the email now. The subject is "Script!"

DirectorX · Aug 13, 2004

Hey, hit me up with a copy too...
digitaldudex@netscape.net

NicklausLouis · Aug 13, 2004

xuetang said:
Poke: Have sent the email now. The subject is "Script!"

Got it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Sorry, my finger locked up.

Poke

Shaw · Aug 13, 2004

xeutang, I seem to have lost your email address. Not sure how as I didn't delete the message you sent...

Anyway could I get your address so I can send you an annotated copy of your screenplay?

Thanks!

OrangeMango · Aug 13, 2004

Sure, it's thatwaszen AT gmail DOT com. Many thanks!

NicklausLouis · Aug 16, 2004

Sent my review today.

Poke

OrangeMango · Aug 22, 2004

Shaw said:
xeutang, I seem to have lost your email address. Not sure how as I didn't delete the message you sent...

Anyway could I get your address so I can send you an annotated copy of your screenplay?

Thanks!

Hey Shaw, have you had a chance to review my script at all? Am looking forward to your feedback

Shaw · Aug 23, 2004

Xeutang,

Sorry for taking so long! I'll send off my review later today

. I've been swamped with work lately (and short term memory seems to be nearly non-extant) for my latest movie. Sorry!

OrangeMango · Aug 23, 2004

Hey no worries! I'll keep an eye out for it. Many thanks