I wanna know if this scene (just an example) has a good show don’t tell. When "No!" why?
Int. family Harding’s house, corridor – midday
Someone closes the door heavily.
ANDY (17) is angry. His face turns red, the teeth crunch, and the vein pulse. He is a volcano which can erupt at all time.
His sister MADDY (15) comes into the corridor. She doesn’t recognize his anger, she looks at her cellphone, waiting for the next message from her friends. Man! When do they answer…? Maddy goes in Andy’s direction.
He still looks to the close door.
Andy turns around. His face becomes angrier. You’re so arrogant. Do you know that?
Int. family Harding’s house, corridor – midday
Someone closes the door heavily.
ANDY (17) is angry. His face turns red, the teeth crunch, and the vein pulse. He is a volcano which can erupt at all time.
His sister MADDY (15) comes into the corridor. She doesn’t recognize his anger, she looks at her cellphone, waiting for the next message from her friends. Man! When do they answer…? Maddy goes in Andy’s direction.
He still looks to the close door.
Maddy
(gaze at cellphone; calm)
Hey, Andy!
(gaze at cellphone; calm)
Hey, Andy!
Andy turns around. His face becomes angrier. You’re so arrogant. Do you know that?
Andy
WHAT?!
WHAT?!