Yikes.
I'm sorry, but there's no way that is going to be funded.
- No video
- Poorly made picture
- Bland, long, and boring
- No attention grabber
- The "who am I" gimmick doesn't work
- The
I Live With People Who Don't Exist sticker is bland.
Put a video up. An attention grabber. An exciting, strange, bizarre attention grabber of high quality. Start by recognizing your fan-base. Watch as many trailers of that genre that you can. Steal from them, and work that into your trailer. Make it short and sweet as well. No one likes repetition and slow, boring scenes.
Have a shorter description. 2 sentence synopsis of the film, prizes and pie chart, then those involved in the film, and links to their past work. Oh, LINKS. Can you post a link to a channel, reviews of your plays, etc. etc. etc. Also, have you never made any short films or other video related projects? That could be of concern to people.
One of the things that bothers me most about Kickstarter is not Kickstarter itself, but the people who think they can make a page, and get a film off of the ground. You have to put effort into it. Financing and distribution are some of the most difficult areas of filmmaking, often overlooked by many. You can't throw someone out onto the internet, and get money and fame thrown back at you. There is technique and time that must go into successfully achieving goals, especially in the field of crowdfunding in the indie filmmaking world.
Think of it this way: Your film is a Christmas tree. If you've ever gone out to buy a Christmas tree, you'll notice that there's usually many to choose from. The ones that are chosen are the big, fancy ones that look appealing and strong. You need to be that above average tree to be chosen. That metaphor goes both for crowdfunding and distribution.
Best of luck though