Okay so I posted the first version of this screenplay awhile back and it was utterly panned. I went back through and rewrote about 80% of it and honestly think it's much better now but still need feedback. This is the first screenplay I ever wrote so I'm still not entirely sure what I'm doing. Any feedback is appreciated. Don't be afraid to tell me if it's still really bad. Honest feedback, any comments are much appreciated.
Thanks for taking the time to look it over
Thanks for taking the time to look it over