Seriously. I have a good script idea, and it's written, but it needs a serious punch up. Mostly just the dialogue, anybody interested. I can pay!
I need a script doctor STAT
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I could give it a look for free.
Right now it's 5 pages. Even with rewrites and any additions I don't see it going over ten.
You're very generous All-Star, but you might be taking money away from someone who needs it
But if you can do it for free, the guy should have you write a version too, maybe he can pick the best things out of both.
Hi, new here but I can help as well
Willing to look at it for free. taking Credit as compensation.
Willing to look at it for free. taking Credit as compensation.
mlesemann specializes in this very thing. She's one of IT's moderators and she is an experienced screenwriter with a rather accomplished career as a producer. I recommend looking her up.
Sorry about taking so long to respond. I had a long weekend and I wasn't expecting so much action.
The short is about escapism. It's kind of a concept short. It opens with a futuristic world where we meet a man who has come into some sort of world changing information, but then we are pulled away and realize we are watching this through VR goggles by a teenager playing an MMO. The kid and his father discuss not playing too many video games but then the kid realizes a seemingly impossible connection between the game story and his real life we are then pulled away again to realize that all of this is a book being read by a man in his easy chair.
I'll DM all of you the first draft sometime this week. I'm making some updates of my own and hopefully I should have something view-able by Friday!
Thanks for the interest!
The short is about escapism. It's kind of a concept short. It opens with a futuristic world where we meet a man who has come into some sort of world changing information, but then we are pulled away and realize we are watching this through VR goggles by a teenager playing an MMO. The kid and his father discuss not playing too many video games but then the kid realizes a seemingly impossible connection between the game story and his real life we are then pulled away again to realize that all of this is a book being read by a man in his easy chair.
I'll DM all of you the first draft sometime this week. I'm making some updates of my own and hopefully I should have something view-able by Friday!
Thanks for the interest!
It needs a better ending. When we finally figure out this is just a guy reading this all in a book, why? Maybe that is not the ending. Maybe one more twist. He is actually a character in the VR, but something has changed in reality when the kid takes the glasses off (a death etc.). Then it comes full circle with twists.
At the end, the man puts down the book beside a newspaper dated years ahead in the future.
It's the 10th anniversary of the event when A.I. machines took over the world.
He has a serious thinking look on his face for a while, then his son calls him over.
They're the same man & teen shown earlier, looking older.
They start playing speed chess, smiling
It's the 10th anniversary of the event when A.I. machines took over the world.
He has a serious thinking look on his face for a while, then his son calls him over.
They're the same man & teen shown earlier, looking older.
They start playing speed chess, smiling
Right, the man has to be connected somehow or it is too random.
PS. We are doctoring, that's what you wanted right?
This is your injection of 10cc’s of Witty Retort.
Yeah of course Indietalk. I love this part of collaboration.
All good stuff and I totally agree. I'm working to get out a first draft by the end of the week so everyone can see the whole picture.
All good stuff and I totally agree. I'm working to get out a first draft by the end of the week so everyone can see the whole picture.