This is the first quarter of my script, a film i plan to make eventually. this is the first script i worked on. Im 18 and I started it about a year ago. this is probably the fifth draft or so. most of what i posted sounds pretty cliche but the rest isnt for the most part. there is some information about the script that you may want to read first, posted in the wanted section, here.
FADE IN
INT. A SMALL BANK - 5:30 P.M.
The bank is very plain, with no pictures or decorations. There are only a couple of plants.
DOLLIES WITH JOE FROM BEHIND
WE FIRST SEE JOE walking through the door, up to the bank teller with his back turned to us.
JOE
Hi.
JUDY- THE BANK TELLER
Hi, how are you?
JOE
Fine, thank you... I would like to withdraw $500 from my account please.
Joe has a slight southern accent, complete with the quiet, southern hospitality.
JUDY- THE BANK TELLER
Sure, what’s your account number.
Joe pulls something out of his pocket.
WE HEAR A GUN COCK BACK
The bank teller’s face quickly changes to a nervous expression.
JOE
Now, what i really want, is for you to go open up that safe back there and put the money in the briefcase my partners holding. Jimmy, give her the briefcase.
WE FINALLY SEE JOE'S FACE as he turns to JIMMY. He is younger than his partner and is wearing sunglasses. Both men are wearing black business suits.
PAN TO JIMMY
He walks up to the teller and gives her the briefcase.
JIMMY
(Smiling)
Here you go miss.
PAN TO ASHLEY
We see that there is another bank teller, ASHLEY. She looks over and realizes a robbery is taking place. She does not say or do anything.
Ashley looks much calmer than her fellow worker.
CUT TO JOE
JOE
Now, let me tell you something. We're not stupid, OK? So if you're going to try anything, just remember, we will not hesitate to kill you, and yes, the gun is loaded, fuckin' believe me..... Go.
Joe looks over to Ashley.
JOE
You, help her.
CAMERA DOLLIES WITH THE TWO GIRLS
They go to the safe and Judy begins to whisper to Ashley.
JUDY- THE BANK TELLER
I don’t want to give them the money.
ASHLEY
(surprised)
...what? Why? It doesn’t even matter to us.
JUDY- THE BANK TELLER
I'm not giving them the money. They're not gonna do anything. These guys are bank robbers not killers. They're in enough trouble as it is. Do you really think they would kill anyone?
ASHLEY
Well... yeah, maybe. I mean, it’s very possible. We don’t have any idea what these people are like. Why does it even matter to you if they take the money or not?
JUDY- THE BANK TELLER
These guys are the scum of the earth. And they're just bank robbers Ashley! I bet those guns aren’t even loaded. Trust me. They're not gonna kill anyone.
PAN WITH JUDY’S HAND
She presses the alarm.
PAN TO ROBBERS
Jimmy, who has seen the teller press the alarm, informs his partner of it.
PAN TO ASHLEY
ASHLEY
Wait a minute, why the fuck did you do that? You're gonna get us killed.
JUDY- THE BANK TELLER
Don't worry Ashley!
ASHLEY
Believe me, I'm not.
CUT TO JOE
JOE
(in an almost singing voice)
Hey giiiiirrllssss, we haven't got all daaaaayyyy.
The two girls walk up to him.
JOE (cont'd)
Now, tell me something. Did you press the alarm?
JUDY- THE BANK TELLER
Alarm? There’s no alarm in here.
PAN TO JUDY
Joe cocks back his gun. Judy’s expression has changed to one of sheer terror. Joe sighs.
JOE
Honey, do you remember, what i told you before? You know you really should have listened to me.
Judy looks nervous and says nothing.
CUT TO JOE
JOE (cont'd)
I mean, who do you think we are? You thought you were goin’ to be able to pull something off like that and get away with it?
Joe looks at Jimmy. Jimmy begins to walk up to the teller.
PAN TO JIMMY AND JUDY’S FACE
Jimmy pulls out a knife and SLICES JUDY TWICE in the gut. The girl FALLS to the ground.
CUT TO JUDY
She is SCREAMING and BLEEDING. Blood is on the floor.
PAN TO ASHLEY
She looks shocked.
JOE (O.S.)
(talking to Ashley)
Okay. You, hurry up and grab that money. Quick.
WE HEAR JUDY STILL SCREAMING OFF SCREEN.
PAN TO JOE
He looks down at Judy, points his gun and shoots her in the head. It is very quiet in the bank again.
PAN TO JIMMY AND ASHLEY
Ashley walks up to Jimmy and hands him the briefcase.
JOE (O.S.)
Alright. Come on, you gotta come with us.
ASHLEY
(surprised)
But..why?
DOLLY WITH EVERYONE
JOE
Not now darlin, you'll have plenty of time to ask questions later. Right now we gotta get the fuck out of here.
Joe, Jimmy, and Ashley quickly walk out of the bank, outside and into the car that is parked in front of the bank. Ashley and the killers drive away.
CUT TO:
INT. JOE’S CAR - 5:40 P.M.
FRONT SHOT, FROM BACK OF CAR
Ashley and the killers are driving away from the bank. Jimmy lights a cigarette.
JIMMY
Shit man, we're fuckin’ lucky the cops didn't show up too fast.
CUT TO JOE, IN REAR VIEW MIRROR
JOE
That bitch, is she your friend?
Joe stops talking.
JOE (cont'd)
I'm sorry, what I should've said was, “was she your friend”?
BACK TO FRONT SHOT, FROM BACK OF CAR
Jimmy laughs and Joe turns to Jimmy.
JOE (cont'd)
What?
The criminals laugh together.
FRONT SHOT OF EVERYONE
ASHLEY
No, not really.
JOE
Dumb dits.
ASHLEY
Where are you taking me? Why are you taking me?
JOE
Don't worry about it. Yer safe. That's all that matters right?
ASHLEY
Well how do I know that? You guys are fucking killers.
JIMMY
(smiling)
Yeah, that's true.
Jimmy giggles.
JOE
Hey, if you don't try anything stupid like your co-worker did back there, I think you'll be OK... But then again, I don't know about Jimmy. As you can see, he does get a little crazy at times. I remember this one time, back home-
CUT TO FLASHBACK
EXT. A DARK DESERTED ROAD
SHOT FROM MIDDLE OF ROAD
The two criminals walk down the side of the road. There is a small civil war cemetery to the right of them. Jimmy is staring at someone OFF SCREEN.
YOUNG GIRL WALKS INTO VIEW
JOE (V.O.)
We were walking down the road late one night, after we did this job, for a friend of ours. There was this young girl, she must’ve been about 17 or so, walking down the road. And I look at Jimmy, and he's just staring at her. I mean, he would not take his eyes off this young girl for a second. Next thing you know-
As the girl is walking by the criminals, WE QUICKLY SEE JIMMY grab the girl.
BACK TO JOE, IN REAR VIEW MIRROR
JOE
the girl’s on the ground screaming.
Kid must’ve still been in the mood after doing that job. You know what i mean?
BACK TO FRONT SHOT, FROM BACK OF CAR
Jimmy turns and looks at Ashley.
JOE
But you shouldn't have any trouble with me. I only do things like that for money, not pleasure. I really don't enjoy killing someone, or raping them. But, you gotta do what you gotta do.
Jimmy smiles, looking at the girl. Then he finally turns back around, to the front of the car.
BACK TO FRONT SHOT OF EVERYONE
JOE
We need gas. Miss, where’s the nearest gas station around here?
ASHLEY
Down this road, on the right.
JOE
Thanks. You know, even though you don’t talk much, you’re a pretty nice girl. I really hate having to take bitches with us. They never shut up, and it always ends up being more messy than it should be. And it gets that bad quite often. And when it does, you gotta do somethin’ about it. You really have no other choice.
SHOT OF GAS STATION
They drive in. Joe parks at an open gas pump.
BACK TO FRONT SHOT, FROM BACK OF CAR
Joe puts his sunglasses on.
JOE
Well, I guess i might as well fill this fucker up.
He laughs. He turns around and looks at Ashley.
JOE (cont'd)
I’m sorry, where are my manners? I must have forgot you were back there because i would have not swore like that. I apologize.
Joe looks around at them both as he speaks.
JOE (cont'd)
You two want anything to drink or eat while I’m here?
JIMMY
Just a bottle of water.
Joe turns around to Ashley. She shakes her head no.
JOE
You sure?
Ashley says nothing. Joe turns back around to the front.
JOE
OK, be back in a minute.
Joe gets out of the car and closes the door. There is silence in the car. Jimmy takes off his sunglasses. After a minute, he sighs.
JIMMY
You know, I don’t do those things anymore. I’m not like that.
He pauses.
JIMMY (cont'd)
(quietly)
...Anymore.
It is again silent in the car. Jimmy takes out a bottle of pills and takes out a pill from it.
JIMMY (cont'd)
Joe just likes to make it look that way so people are frightened. I don’t enjoy looking that way.
After a minute, Joe opens the door and gets in. He hands Jimmy his water.
JOE
Alright, lets go.
He starts up the car and begins to drive away. Jimmy takes the pill.
JOE
I hope you two had a nice, friendly conversation while i was gone.
BACK TO SHOT OF GAS STATION
Joe drives out of the gas station back on the road they were before.
BACK TO FRONT SHOT OF EVERYONE
ASHLEY
Where are we going?
JOE
The Paraside honey, the good ol' paraside. We just have to find it first. I'm not from around here, don't really know where we are. Do you?
ASHLEY
Not really, I don't live around here.
JOE
No, actually, I think I am from around here, somewhere. Don't know exactly where. All that cheddar's turned my brain to mush. Can't remember a damn thing anymore. Speaking of cheddar, i sure can go for a bump right now, huh? How 'bout you Jimmy?
JIMMY
Yeah that'd be great.
JOE
You see, it was this kid who got me doin’ that shit. Now, I can’t even stop. Can you Believe I was a nice quiet country-boy before findin’ this kid? Fuckin’ corrupted my mind big time, and fucked up my brain.
Ashley doesn't reply.
JOE (cont'd)
I mean I know that’s hard to believe but it’s true. Damn, even the car smells like that shit.
There is a short silence in the car. Jimmy is mostly staring out of his window, looking at the sights.
JOE
Alright no more talkin’ about us, what about you? You sure you’re from around here? You don’t sound like you’ve lived here forever.
ASHLEY
I've lived down here my entire life.
JOE
Is that so? Well, its a good thing you don't talk like that. I never could stand those fucking accents anyway. I mean, don’t get me wrong, I love the south. It’s just some of the people I don’t like. And the buisness is a bit slower around here too. Its just a lot easier back up home. Well, our old home at least. Yep, I noticed the change right away, and I loved it to tell you the truth.
There is a silence in the car.
JOE (cont'd)
You know, people are always complainin’ about the way it smells down here, and I just don’t know why. I love the smell. There’s something...genuine about it, you know?
ASHLEY
...No, I don’t know actually.
BACK TO FRONT SHOT, FROM BACK OF CAR
Joe turns around looks at the girl and smiles, then he turns back around.
JOE
I apologize for rambling on. Just tryin’ to make you feel comfortable.
JIMMY
Pull over, I wanna count this money.
JOE
Alright. I gotta piss anyways.
JIMMY
Well, who's gonna watch her?
JOE
She's not gonna try anything. She knows what'll happen if she does.
BACK TO JOE, IN REAR VIEW MIRROR
JOE
Right, honey?
CUT TO ASHLEY
Ashley says nothing.
BACK TO FRONT SHOT, FROM BACK OF CAR
Jimmy turns and looks at Ashley.
JIMMY
If you don't mind me asking Miss, what's your name?
ASHLEY
Mandy.
JOE
Really? You don't look like an Amanda.
Joe laughs and Jimmy smiles, and turns back around.
ASHLEY
It's Mandy, not Amanda.
JOE
Oh... Interesting, I didn't think you were able to name your kid Mandy. Thought it was illegal or somethin’. Figured it had to be Amanda. Well, as they say you learn something new everyday, ain't that right Jimmy?
JIMMY
That's right.
BACK TO JOE, IN REAR VIEW MIRROR
Joe smiles.
BACK TO FRONT SHOT, FROM BACK OF CAR
Joe turns to Jimmy and Jimmy turns to Joe, and they both laugh.
JOE
Okay, I'm pullin over here.
Joe pulls the car over. He turns around to look at Ashley.
JOE (cont'd)
Stay in the car. And don't try anything.
Joe and Jimmy get out of the car. Jimmy throws his cigarette away.
CUT TO:
EXT. NEAR A LAKE AND FIELD - 6:15 P.M.
Joe and Jimmy are out of the car. To the left of the car is a lake. To the right is a small hill that leads to a field. Joe looks at the lake.
JOE
Now I must say, this is really beautiful. What a nice view.
Joe moves away from the car and starts to urinate by the lake. WE SEE JIMMY as he puts the briefcase on the car and walks over to the lake and starts to clean his knife.
CUT TO ASHLEY
She looks at the criminals who are facing the other direction and then looks to see if the keys are in the ignition.
CUT TO IGNITION
There are no keys.
BACK OF JIMMY NEAR CAR
He is opening up the briefcase. When the killers are not looking she gets out of the car and starts to run towards the hill. Jimmy looks up at her.
JIMMY
Hey!
PAN TO JOE
He is urinating. He turns to look at what is happening. Jimmy turns to Joe.
JIMMY
Joe, come on!
JOE
Hold on man, I gotta finish pissin’ first, I can't just stop when I'm already going. Burns like a motherfucker.
PAN TO JIMMY
He starts to run after the girl.
JIMMY
You bitch!
PAN TO JOE
He finishes urinating, puts the briefcase back in the car, and follows Jimmy slowly.
CUT TO ASHLEY
Ashley reaches the top of the hill. She looks around the field and sees an old house and a barn. She runs into the house, which is closer.
CUT TO INSIDE HOUSE
Ashley walks into the house and quickly looks around.
ASHLEY
Hello! Is anybody there?
PAN AROUND INTERIOR OF HOUSE.
The house is very dirty. It has only an old table with two candles on it. There are also two chairs beside the table.
PANS WITH ASHLEY
She runs up the stairs.
CUT TO INSIDE ROOM
There is a dirty mattress in the only upstairs room. No one is there.
CUT TO DOWNSTAIRS
Ashley runs back downstairs, out of the house and towards the barn.
EXT. OUTSIDE, ON THE FIELD
CUT TO JIMMY
He is about to get to the top of the hill. As he gets to the top of the hill, he stops and looks to see the house and barn on the field.
CUT TO BEHIND ASHLEY, JIMMY IS IN VIEW, IN THE DISTANCE
Ashley is hiding on the side of the barn looking at Jimmy. She sees him walk into the house. Ashley quickly walks into the barn.
CUT TO BACK OF JOE
He is still walking up the hill. Joe finally gets to the top of the hill. He looks around the field to notice he is alone.
CUT TO BEHIND ASHLEY, INSIDE BARN
PAN AROUND BARN
There is no one else in the barn. There is nothing but hay and a few tools.
CUT CLOSE TO SOME BLOOD
It is stained on one of the walls.
EXT. OUTSIDE, NEAR THE BARN
SHOT IN FRONT OF HOUSE
Joe has come out of the house. He looks towards the barn.
CUT TO BARN, FROM NEAR THE HOUSE
Someone is walking by the barn.
CANNOT SEE PERSON CLEARLY
CAMERA ALTERNATES THE TWO FAR SHOTS AS THE PEOPLE SPEAK
JOE
Hey?
JIMMY
Yeah?
JOE
Jimmy?
JIMMY
Yeah.
JOE
Did you find her?
JIMMY
No.
JOE
Well did you check in there?
JIMMY
The barn? I already checked it before checking the field and the woods.
JOE
Well, check it again.
JIMMY
What? Why?
JOE
She could’ve been hiding.
JIMMY
I would’ve found her Joe, you know that.
JOE
Maybe she wasn't in there when you looked.
Jimmy says nothing.
JOE (cont'd)
Just fuckin do it man!
Jimmy walks into the barn.
CUT TO FRONT OF JOE
He is watching Jimmy.
BACK TO FAR SHOT OF BARN
Jimmy is standing as if he is looking over something on the ground. He then neals down, still looking at the same spot.
BACK TO FRONT OF JOE
Joe starts to walk towards the barn and takes his sunglasses off.
CUT TO BEHIND JOE
He quickly walks into the barn.
JIMMY IS ALSO IN VIEW
WE SEE THEY ARE LOOKING down AT ASHLEY’S DEAD BODY.
JOE
Did you hear her screaming or anything?
JIMMY
I didn't hear shit.
JOE
Well, where the fuck were you?
JIMMY
I told you, after I checked the barn, I checked the woods and the rest of the field.
JOE
Well, how the fuck didn't you hear her man?
JIMMY
I don't know! It doesn't even matter now, she's dead anyways. What do you want to do with her?
JOE
Carry her to the car and we'll dump her in that lake over there.
Joe leaves to go get the car. Jimmy is still standing looking over the body. He looks around the barn.
BLACK AND WHITE PAN AROUND BARN
CUT TO BLACK AND WHITE OVER BARN
Jimmy picks up the body and carries it outside of the barn. He then goes back inside the barn, picks up some clean hay and throws it over the
BLOOD SOAKED hay.
CUT TO THOUGH HOUSE WINDOW OF JOE
He is walking away from the barn.
CUT BEHIND JOE
He is about to walk down the hill, to the car.
RISES OVER JOE’S HEAD SHOWING CAR, LAKE, AND SUNSET
JOE WALKS INTO FRAME
He is walking to the car. He gets into it and drives it near the hill.
JIMMY WALKS INTO FRAME
He is holding Ashley's body. Joe gets out of the car and opens the trunk. Jimmy puts Ashley’s body in it and Joe closes the trunk. They then get in the car and drive to the other side of the lake. They get out of the car, open the trunk and throw her body into the lake.
FADE IN
INT. A SMALL BANK - 5:30 P.M.
The bank is very plain, with no pictures or decorations. There are only a couple of plants.
DOLLIES WITH JOE FROM BEHIND
WE FIRST SEE JOE walking through the door, up to the bank teller with his back turned to us.
JOE
Hi.
JUDY- THE BANK TELLER
Hi, how are you?
JOE
Fine, thank you... I would like to withdraw $500 from my account please.
Joe has a slight southern accent, complete with the quiet, southern hospitality.
JUDY- THE BANK TELLER
Sure, what’s your account number.
Joe pulls something out of his pocket.
WE HEAR A GUN COCK BACK
The bank teller’s face quickly changes to a nervous expression.
JOE
Now, what i really want, is for you to go open up that safe back there and put the money in the briefcase my partners holding. Jimmy, give her the briefcase.
WE FINALLY SEE JOE'S FACE as he turns to JIMMY. He is younger than his partner and is wearing sunglasses. Both men are wearing black business suits.
PAN TO JIMMY
He walks up to the teller and gives her the briefcase.
JIMMY
(Smiling)
Here you go miss.
PAN TO ASHLEY
We see that there is another bank teller, ASHLEY. She looks over and realizes a robbery is taking place. She does not say or do anything.
Ashley looks much calmer than her fellow worker.
CUT TO JOE
JOE
Now, let me tell you something. We're not stupid, OK? So if you're going to try anything, just remember, we will not hesitate to kill you, and yes, the gun is loaded, fuckin' believe me..... Go.
Joe looks over to Ashley.
JOE
You, help her.
CAMERA DOLLIES WITH THE TWO GIRLS
They go to the safe and Judy begins to whisper to Ashley.
JUDY- THE BANK TELLER
I don’t want to give them the money.
ASHLEY
(surprised)
...what? Why? It doesn’t even matter to us.
JUDY- THE BANK TELLER
I'm not giving them the money. They're not gonna do anything. These guys are bank robbers not killers. They're in enough trouble as it is. Do you really think they would kill anyone?
ASHLEY
Well... yeah, maybe. I mean, it’s very possible. We don’t have any idea what these people are like. Why does it even matter to you if they take the money or not?
JUDY- THE BANK TELLER
These guys are the scum of the earth. And they're just bank robbers Ashley! I bet those guns aren’t even loaded. Trust me. They're not gonna kill anyone.
PAN WITH JUDY’S HAND
She presses the alarm.
PAN TO ROBBERS
Jimmy, who has seen the teller press the alarm, informs his partner of it.
PAN TO ASHLEY
ASHLEY
Wait a minute, why the fuck did you do that? You're gonna get us killed.
JUDY- THE BANK TELLER
Don't worry Ashley!
ASHLEY
Believe me, I'm not.
CUT TO JOE
JOE
(in an almost singing voice)
Hey giiiiirrllssss, we haven't got all daaaaayyyy.
The two girls walk up to him.
JOE (cont'd)
Now, tell me something. Did you press the alarm?
JUDY- THE BANK TELLER
Alarm? There’s no alarm in here.
PAN TO JUDY
Joe cocks back his gun. Judy’s expression has changed to one of sheer terror. Joe sighs.
JOE
Honey, do you remember, what i told you before? You know you really should have listened to me.
Judy looks nervous and says nothing.
CUT TO JOE
JOE (cont'd)
I mean, who do you think we are? You thought you were goin’ to be able to pull something off like that and get away with it?
Joe looks at Jimmy. Jimmy begins to walk up to the teller.
PAN TO JIMMY AND JUDY’S FACE
Jimmy pulls out a knife and SLICES JUDY TWICE in the gut. The girl FALLS to the ground.
CUT TO JUDY
She is SCREAMING and BLEEDING. Blood is on the floor.
PAN TO ASHLEY
She looks shocked.
JOE (O.S.)
(talking to Ashley)
Okay. You, hurry up and grab that money. Quick.
WE HEAR JUDY STILL SCREAMING OFF SCREEN.
PAN TO JOE
He looks down at Judy, points his gun and shoots her in the head. It is very quiet in the bank again.
PAN TO JIMMY AND ASHLEY
Ashley walks up to Jimmy and hands him the briefcase.
JOE (O.S.)
Alright. Come on, you gotta come with us.
ASHLEY
(surprised)
But..why?
DOLLY WITH EVERYONE
JOE
Not now darlin, you'll have plenty of time to ask questions later. Right now we gotta get the fuck out of here.
Joe, Jimmy, and Ashley quickly walk out of the bank, outside and into the car that is parked in front of the bank. Ashley and the killers drive away.
CUT TO:
INT. JOE’S CAR - 5:40 P.M.
FRONT SHOT, FROM BACK OF CAR
Ashley and the killers are driving away from the bank. Jimmy lights a cigarette.
JIMMY
Shit man, we're fuckin’ lucky the cops didn't show up too fast.
CUT TO JOE, IN REAR VIEW MIRROR
JOE
That bitch, is she your friend?
Joe stops talking.
JOE (cont'd)
I'm sorry, what I should've said was, “was she your friend”?
BACK TO FRONT SHOT, FROM BACK OF CAR
Jimmy laughs and Joe turns to Jimmy.
JOE (cont'd)
What?
The criminals laugh together.
FRONT SHOT OF EVERYONE
ASHLEY
No, not really.
JOE
Dumb dits.
ASHLEY
Where are you taking me? Why are you taking me?
JOE
Don't worry about it. Yer safe. That's all that matters right?
ASHLEY
Well how do I know that? You guys are fucking killers.
JIMMY
(smiling)
Yeah, that's true.
Jimmy giggles.
JOE
Hey, if you don't try anything stupid like your co-worker did back there, I think you'll be OK... But then again, I don't know about Jimmy. As you can see, he does get a little crazy at times. I remember this one time, back home-
CUT TO FLASHBACK
EXT. A DARK DESERTED ROAD
SHOT FROM MIDDLE OF ROAD
The two criminals walk down the side of the road. There is a small civil war cemetery to the right of them. Jimmy is staring at someone OFF SCREEN.
YOUNG GIRL WALKS INTO VIEW
JOE (V.O.)
We were walking down the road late one night, after we did this job, for a friend of ours. There was this young girl, she must’ve been about 17 or so, walking down the road. And I look at Jimmy, and he's just staring at her. I mean, he would not take his eyes off this young girl for a second. Next thing you know-
As the girl is walking by the criminals, WE QUICKLY SEE JIMMY grab the girl.
BACK TO JOE, IN REAR VIEW MIRROR
JOE
the girl’s on the ground screaming.
Kid must’ve still been in the mood after doing that job. You know what i mean?
BACK TO FRONT SHOT, FROM BACK OF CAR
Jimmy turns and looks at Ashley.
JOE
But you shouldn't have any trouble with me. I only do things like that for money, not pleasure. I really don't enjoy killing someone, or raping them. But, you gotta do what you gotta do.
Jimmy smiles, looking at the girl. Then he finally turns back around, to the front of the car.
BACK TO FRONT SHOT OF EVERYONE
JOE
We need gas. Miss, where’s the nearest gas station around here?
ASHLEY
Down this road, on the right.
JOE
Thanks. You know, even though you don’t talk much, you’re a pretty nice girl. I really hate having to take bitches with us. They never shut up, and it always ends up being more messy than it should be. And it gets that bad quite often. And when it does, you gotta do somethin’ about it. You really have no other choice.
SHOT OF GAS STATION
They drive in. Joe parks at an open gas pump.
BACK TO FRONT SHOT, FROM BACK OF CAR
Joe puts his sunglasses on.
JOE
Well, I guess i might as well fill this fucker up.
He laughs. He turns around and looks at Ashley.
JOE (cont'd)
I’m sorry, where are my manners? I must have forgot you were back there because i would have not swore like that. I apologize.
Joe looks around at them both as he speaks.
JOE (cont'd)
You two want anything to drink or eat while I’m here?
JIMMY
Just a bottle of water.
Joe turns around to Ashley. She shakes her head no.
JOE
You sure?
Ashley says nothing. Joe turns back around to the front.
JOE
OK, be back in a minute.
Joe gets out of the car and closes the door. There is silence in the car. Jimmy takes off his sunglasses. After a minute, he sighs.
JIMMY
You know, I don’t do those things anymore. I’m not like that.
He pauses.
JIMMY (cont'd)
(quietly)
...Anymore.
It is again silent in the car. Jimmy takes out a bottle of pills and takes out a pill from it.
JIMMY (cont'd)
Joe just likes to make it look that way so people are frightened. I don’t enjoy looking that way.
After a minute, Joe opens the door and gets in. He hands Jimmy his water.
JOE
Alright, lets go.
He starts up the car and begins to drive away. Jimmy takes the pill.
JOE
I hope you two had a nice, friendly conversation while i was gone.
BACK TO SHOT OF GAS STATION
Joe drives out of the gas station back on the road they were before.
BACK TO FRONT SHOT OF EVERYONE
ASHLEY
Where are we going?
JOE
The Paraside honey, the good ol' paraside. We just have to find it first. I'm not from around here, don't really know where we are. Do you?
ASHLEY
Not really, I don't live around here.
JOE
No, actually, I think I am from around here, somewhere. Don't know exactly where. All that cheddar's turned my brain to mush. Can't remember a damn thing anymore. Speaking of cheddar, i sure can go for a bump right now, huh? How 'bout you Jimmy?
JIMMY
Yeah that'd be great.
JOE
You see, it was this kid who got me doin’ that shit. Now, I can’t even stop. Can you Believe I was a nice quiet country-boy before findin’ this kid? Fuckin’ corrupted my mind big time, and fucked up my brain.
Ashley doesn't reply.
JOE (cont'd)
I mean I know that’s hard to believe but it’s true. Damn, even the car smells like that shit.
There is a short silence in the car. Jimmy is mostly staring out of his window, looking at the sights.
JOE
Alright no more talkin’ about us, what about you? You sure you’re from around here? You don’t sound like you’ve lived here forever.
ASHLEY
I've lived down here my entire life.
JOE
Is that so? Well, its a good thing you don't talk like that. I never could stand those fucking accents anyway. I mean, don’t get me wrong, I love the south. It’s just some of the people I don’t like. And the buisness is a bit slower around here too. Its just a lot easier back up home. Well, our old home at least. Yep, I noticed the change right away, and I loved it to tell you the truth.
There is a silence in the car.
JOE (cont'd)
You know, people are always complainin’ about the way it smells down here, and I just don’t know why. I love the smell. There’s something...genuine about it, you know?
ASHLEY
...No, I don’t know actually.
BACK TO FRONT SHOT, FROM BACK OF CAR
Joe turns around looks at the girl and smiles, then he turns back around.
JOE
I apologize for rambling on. Just tryin’ to make you feel comfortable.
JIMMY
Pull over, I wanna count this money.
JOE
Alright. I gotta piss anyways.
JIMMY
Well, who's gonna watch her?
JOE
She's not gonna try anything. She knows what'll happen if she does.
BACK TO JOE, IN REAR VIEW MIRROR
JOE
Right, honey?
CUT TO ASHLEY
Ashley says nothing.
BACK TO FRONT SHOT, FROM BACK OF CAR
Jimmy turns and looks at Ashley.
JIMMY
If you don't mind me asking Miss, what's your name?
ASHLEY
Mandy.
JOE
Really? You don't look like an Amanda.
Joe laughs and Jimmy smiles, and turns back around.
ASHLEY
It's Mandy, not Amanda.
JOE
Oh... Interesting, I didn't think you were able to name your kid Mandy. Thought it was illegal or somethin’. Figured it had to be Amanda. Well, as they say you learn something new everyday, ain't that right Jimmy?
JIMMY
That's right.
BACK TO JOE, IN REAR VIEW MIRROR
Joe smiles.
BACK TO FRONT SHOT, FROM BACK OF CAR
Joe turns to Jimmy and Jimmy turns to Joe, and they both laugh.
JOE
Okay, I'm pullin over here.
Joe pulls the car over. He turns around to look at Ashley.
JOE (cont'd)
Stay in the car. And don't try anything.
Joe and Jimmy get out of the car. Jimmy throws his cigarette away.
CUT TO:
EXT. NEAR A LAKE AND FIELD - 6:15 P.M.
Joe and Jimmy are out of the car. To the left of the car is a lake. To the right is a small hill that leads to a field. Joe looks at the lake.
JOE
Now I must say, this is really beautiful. What a nice view.
Joe moves away from the car and starts to urinate by the lake. WE SEE JIMMY as he puts the briefcase on the car and walks over to the lake and starts to clean his knife.
CUT TO ASHLEY
She looks at the criminals who are facing the other direction and then looks to see if the keys are in the ignition.
CUT TO IGNITION
There are no keys.
BACK OF JIMMY NEAR CAR
He is opening up the briefcase. When the killers are not looking she gets out of the car and starts to run towards the hill. Jimmy looks up at her.
JIMMY
Hey!
PAN TO JOE
He is urinating. He turns to look at what is happening. Jimmy turns to Joe.
JIMMY
Joe, come on!
JOE
Hold on man, I gotta finish pissin’ first, I can't just stop when I'm already going. Burns like a motherfucker.
PAN TO JIMMY
He starts to run after the girl.
JIMMY
You bitch!
PAN TO JOE
He finishes urinating, puts the briefcase back in the car, and follows Jimmy slowly.
CUT TO ASHLEY
Ashley reaches the top of the hill. She looks around the field and sees an old house and a barn. She runs into the house, which is closer.
CUT TO INSIDE HOUSE
Ashley walks into the house and quickly looks around.
ASHLEY
Hello! Is anybody there?
PAN AROUND INTERIOR OF HOUSE.
The house is very dirty. It has only an old table with two candles on it. There are also two chairs beside the table.
PANS WITH ASHLEY
She runs up the stairs.
CUT TO INSIDE ROOM
There is a dirty mattress in the only upstairs room. No one is there.
CUT TO DOWNSTAIRS
Ashley runs back downstairs, out of the house and towards the barn.
EXT. OUTSIDE, ON THE FIELD
CUT TO JIMMY
He is about to get to the top of the hill. As he gets to the top of the hill, he stops and looks to see the house and barn on the field.
CUT TO BEHIND ASHLEY, JIMMY IS IN VIEW, IN THE DISTANCE
Ashley is hiding on the side of the barn looking at Jimmy. She sees him walk into the house. Ashley quickly walks into the barn.
CUT TO BACK OF JOE
He is still walking up the hill. Joe finally gets to the top of the hill. He looks around the field to notice he is alone.
CUT TO BEHIND ASHLEY, INSIDE BARN
PAN AROUND BARN
There is no one else in the barn. There is nothing but hay and a few tools.
CUT CLOSE TO SOME BLOOD
It is stained on one of the walls.
EXT. OUTSIDE, NEAR THE BARN
SHOT IN FRONT OF HOUSE
Joe has come out of the house. He looks towards the barn.
CUT TO BARN, FROM NEAR THE HOUSE
Someone is walking by the barn.
CANNOT SEE PERSON CLEARLY
CAMERA ALTERNATES THE TWO FAR SHOTS AS THE PEOPLE SPEAK
JOE
Hey?
JIMMY
Yeah?
JOE
Jimmy?
JIMMY
Yeah.
JOE
Did you find her?
JIMMY
No.
JOE
Well did you check in there?
JIMMY
The barn? I already checked it before checking the field and the woods.
JOE
Well, check it again.
JIMMY
What? Why?
JOE
She could’ve been hiding.
JIMMY
I would’ve found her Joe, you know that.
JOE
Maybe she wasn't in there when you looked.
Jimmy says nothing.
JOE (cont'd)
Just fuckin do it man!
Jimmy walks into the barn.
CUT TO FRONT OF JOE
He is watching Jimmy.
BACK TO FAR SHOT OF BARN
Jimmy is standing as if he is looking over something on the ground. He then neals down, still looking at the same spot.
BACK TO FRONT OF JOE
Joe starts to walk towards the barn and takes his sunglasses off.
CUT TO BEHIND JOE
He quickly walks into the barn.
JIMMY IS ALSO IN VIEW
WE SEE THEY ARE LOOKING down AT ASHLEY’S DEAD BODY.
JOE
Did you hear her screaming or anything?
JIMMY
I didn't hear shit.
JOE
Well, where the fuck were you?
JIMMY
I told you, after I checked the barn, I checked the woods and the rest of the field.
JOE
Well, how the fuck didn't you hear her man?
JIMMY
I don't know! It doesn't even matter now, she's dead anyways. What do you want to do with her?
JOE
Carry her to the car and we'll dump her in that lake over there.
Joe leaves to go get the car. Jimmy is still standing looking over the body. He looks around the barn.
BLACK AND WHITE PAN AROUND BARN
CUT TO BLACK AND WHITE OVER BARN
Jimmy picks up the body and carries it outside of the barn. He then goes back inside the barn, picks up some clean hay and throws it over the
BLOOD SOAKED hay.
CUT TO THOUGH HOUSE WINDOW OF JOE
He is walking away from the barn.
CUT BEHIND JOE
He is about to walk down the hill, to the car.
RISES OVER JOE’S HEAD SHOWING CAR, LAKE, AND SUNSET
JOE WALKS INTO FRAME
He is walking to the car. He gets into it and drives it near the hill.
JIMMY WALKS INTO FRAME
He is holding Ashley's body. Joe gets out of the car and opens the trunk. Jimmy puts Ashley’s body in it and Joe closes the trunk. They then get in the car and drive to the other side of the lake. They get out of the car, open the trunk and throw her body into the lake.
