EDM17 said:the ways you delivered your lines.
You're ruinin' my fun and my good time!
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EDM17 said:the ways you delivered your lines.
EDM17 said:Funny stuff Dave! Very nice for your first film. Both you and Steve had me laughing just from the dialogue and the ways you delivered your lines.
FilmJumper said:Just watched it...
To be honest, I was getting a little bored...
Then WHAM!
Loved the ending... The guy got what he deserved...
I also thought the jogging seemed a little long but it would have been fine if you would have mixed it up a bit with some other shots of the guy running instead of letting him run in the frame... Don't be afraid to use that camera... Coverage... Closeups.... etc. I think with some more running footage inserted with different angles the running would move right along...
I didn't like the dialog too much... I would have gone for more subtext... Have your character MEAN the same thing but using different dialog that really SMACKS! For example... I just read a script today that had a great scene of dialog... One of the lines was:
Drive it like you stole it!
Instead of the usual ON THE NOSE example...
Please drive this car really fast.
See the difference? Since the runner didn't have too much dialog, I would rather hear something that SMACKS!
All in all, great first film. Great ending. Well done.
filmy