I didn't care for this too much. Not sure what the reconstituted web conference footage was attempting to accomplish, but it almost made me turn it off. I think it is there to set a sort of Blair Witch vibe, but it takes too long. When the detective started, there was something off about his dialect...it may be real but it sounds forced and phony. And his lines...young men just don't talk like Columbo. He'd know his phone doesn't have the capacity to play video; he wouldn't have to look at it. The physical comedy gag of the Fed not being able to open his door and taking an inordinate amount of time to get out the passenger side fell flat...you know that's the gag as it begins and then have to wait as it plays out.
The handheld photography was fine and the sound is great, but if this is a pilot or a pitch it didn't hook me or inspire me to want more. I think I know the elements, and where you might take them, and I'd like to be more interested, but I think you could accomplish the same goals in half the time. Play up the madcap, speed up the gags, cut the telephone conversation in half.
Hope this helps.
