Feedback - High Tech. 94pages

[DannyPinata]

Hi, just finished a re-write in the past couple of days and was hoping for some feedback.

LOGLINE: "After beginning a relationship with woman, James a lazy robot becomes increasingly uncertain about their compatibility, and the nature of his existence."

Here's a link to the script: https://www.dropbox.com/s/4ny8p41ozhc2h1q/High Tech - Dopbox Copy.pdf?dl=0

If you hate the logline and that's stopping you reading the script, then that's still helpful feedback. Thanks!

 

[Murdock]

I read the first couple pages. You have the same habit as I. You're editing and directing in your screen play. I do the same thing. If you are not making the film yourself, I would suggest changing this.