I have written a longer script - the length varies depending on editor/export format, but currently in the region of 60 pages. I know what I am trying to do in each scene, but I need the occasional opinion poll on realism.
The scene I've linked to below is a short one, and it shows how two students move from a-bit-more-than-friends to a-bit-less-than-a-couple. I would greatly appreciate opinions on how realistic the situation/interaction is. Obviously you don't know the characters, but does anything jump out as unrealistic.
MARK has invited EMILY out to a Bonfire Night event...
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On last note, I have a very strong image in my mind when I write, so it is written like a shooting script.
The scene I've linked to below is a short one, and it shows how two students move from a-bit-more-than-friends to a-bit-less-than-a-couple. I would greatly appreciate opinions on how realistic the situation/interaction is. Obviously you don't know the characters, but does anything jump out as unrealistic.
MARK has invited EMILY out to a Bonfire Night event...
LINK
On last note, I have a very strong image in my mind when I write, so it is written like a shooting script.