Hey how are you all doing? New member here. So I'll post just a quick example of how i write, I write with passion, but - my grammer editing isn't the best. I would like to find a screenwriter to join with me in my new company www.verystudios.com, to promote both my scripts and those that join the team.
Well this is an example of how i write, its about a young boy in a wheel chair that gets powers from a comic book.
FADE IN:
INT: BEDROOM - NIGHT
We see an autistic boy sitting by the window thinking, looking at POF a pretty girl walking by with a hot sports jock with a jacket, footballer.
INT. INSIDE BOYS BEDROOM
We see the boy sigh and shrug his shoulders, then turn around, he is in a wheel chair he turns and wheels his chair around to near his bed, as we look around the room there are pictures of all his drawings.
Close up- we see him wheel his wheel chair to the side and lay back on his bed and grab a comic book from his side. Its an action hero comic book, (name of comic book – genero the force of good - )
BRENDON
Action hero. How cool.
As he is laying on his bed he flips threw a few pages he his holding up above him, where he looks close up the action hero “genoro the force of good –
BRENDON
The hero always saves the day
He continues to flip threw the comic book – close up he flips threw the pages where we see – close up the comic book here genero cuddles a pretty girl, brendon close up rubs his finger across the picture.
BRENDON
And always gets the girl. ( brendon huffs to himself)
We hear brendons mum from downstairs call out
INT. DOWNSTAIRS
Brendons mum is a stressed out mother ( but loving ) with a son in a wheel chair, whos father left them both. She loves her son – continues with the call out, we see her walk to the stairs and call up to brendan
INT. BRENDANS ROOM
We see Brendan still flipping threw the comic book pages laying on his bed with his bent wheel chair to his left
BRENDANS MUM (O.S)
Brendon don’t forget to take your medication.
Brendon still mumbles to himself. To him he doesn’t even want to think about being in a wheel chair he’s reading his comic book and wanting a different place in his life.
BRENDON
(to himself)
Superhero,..
He rubs his hand along the picture of pretty girl
BRENDAN
Pretty girls only in stories I guess .
Downstairs his mum calls out again
BRENDONS MUM (0.S)
Brendon
Brendon slaps the comic book on his ill felt paralized legs in frustration and calls back to his mum as he opens his nearby draw to the left
BRENDON
(frustrated)
okay mum! Damn would you give me a break,
BRENDONS MUM (O.S)
What did I say?
BRENDON
Nothing mum just same thing you say and I do hundred times a day.
INT. DOWNSTAIRS
We see brendons mum holding onto the stairs with an ear up after she called - not understanding brandons frustration
BRENDONS MUM
Are you okay I’m coming up.
She begins to walk up the stairs
INT. BRENDONS ROOM
Brendon grabs close up blue pills out of his left draws and calls out to his mum
BRENDONS MUM
No its okay mum don’t worry about it… it .. its fine. Don’t worry okay , (to himself ) I’m taking my pills as I always do..
Brendon swallows 5 pills for his treatment of disablity
INT. DOWNSTAIRS
His mum submissivly pulls away from the stairs while sad
BRENDONS MUM
Okay well night… (son)
INT. UPSTIARS - BRENDONS ROOM
We see brendon scull a glass of water to finish his meds, ignoring to answer back his mum
INT. DOWNSTAIRS
We see brendons mum sit down put her hand in her hair then crack bottle of jack daniels and poor a DRINK
BRENDONS MUM
Fuck
INT. BRENDONS ROOM
PICKS up the comin book again but his vision of the comic book has gone funny from the drugs , as he looks at the blurry visions of the comic book he begins to pass out
BRENDON
(dazed)
super hero yer right, not me
he begins to pass out falls back and slapps the book on his stomach still open as he begins to pass out from the meds
BRENDON
Not mee..
We cut to a montage of brendons dreams as he appears in a scene with hot girls around him and he is standing with hot chicks around him as he taps his legs as he is stands
BRENDON
(to himself)
is this real?
A hot girl with lipstick extra strong walks past him
HOT GIRL
You better believe it baby…
BRENDON
Holy shit.
HOT GIRL
Wanna dance
BRENDON
Hell yeah
They begin to dance as they dance and brendon shakes his head and he sweating, he sweats more and more as the girl walks away
HOT GIRL
Whats wrong with you, eww
Brendon puts his arm out as he’s standing on the dance floor as everyone laughin at him on the dance floor, eww as people are pointing at him but he defends himself
BRENDON
Wait. Wait I can walk ,
He looks around as people laugh and point, in his head he hears eww ewww
BRENDON
(in his dream)
no stop stop… stop
he hears eww eww from the girls around him people pointing on the dance floor, even the disc jockey laughs at him
INT. BRENDONS ROOM
We see brendons eyes pof his eyes open in a blur
BRENDONS MUM
Are you… you .. okay.. brendon!
Brendon wakes up grabs his mums arms
BRENDON
(gasps)
BRENDONS MUM
Are you okay.. you were having a nightmare
Brendon sits up then looks over to the comic book flapping to the wind ( close up shows that hot girl from the book) he pushes his mum away
BRENDON
I’m fine mum
His mum gets up and walks to the door to go downstairs
BRENDON
Okay well come down when your ready breakfast is scrambled eggs your favourite
Brendon sits on the bed not answering, his mum concerned
BRENDONS MUM
Are you sure your okay?
BRENDON
(cranky)
I said I was okay mum shit will you give me a break
BRENDONS MUM
Okay sun
She turns and away from brendon down the hall way she wipes her nose with a half tear.
We see Jacob sit up and scratch his head with sum remorse in what he , the way he just talked to his mum as he looks to the door but shes already gone as he hears her walk down the stairs.
He feels a bit sad as he sits up passing- wiping - the sweaty head from his brow
BRENDON
(to himself)
shit
he sits up proper - looks at his lifeless legs
BRENDON
(to himself)
why me?..
he looks at a nearby local nirvana picture
BRENDON
Not the only one okay good for you to say
He picks up his legs with some pain and brings them over the side of bed with some pain the pages of the comic book are swinging away from the wind but there is not much wind. Pages of the comic book are flapping away, brendon plants his legs over the side of the bed. He plants his feet down, he notices his calves are a bit bigger, is it just his imagination?
Close up - he feels his calves, they are a bit bitter and stronger,, close up he looks over and sees close up the super hero page is open with the comic book - his leg calv is big and strong. He looks down - his feet on the the cold wooden ground as close up he almost wiggles a toe but cant he gets cranky and closes the book
BRENDON
(to himself-sarcastic)
Yer right..
He jumps on his wheel chair and begins to wheel out as he looks back- the comic book again opens up to the super hero page he closed. As he stops and looks but then his mum calls again from down stairs
BRENDONS MUM
Brendon I’ts getting cold are you coming?
Brendon thinks to himself and looks at his legs again as he wheel chairs out of his bed room the camera pans to the comic book of the super hero standing in a strong stance , as the book is left open on his bed
Well this is an example of how i write, its about a young boy in a wheel chair that gets powers from a comic book.
FADE IN:
INT: BEDROOM - NIGHT
We see an autistic boy sitting by the window thinking, looking at POF a pretty girl walking by with a hot sports jock with a jacket, footballer.
INT. INSIDE BOYS BEDROOM
We see the boy sigh and shrug his shoulders, then turn around, he is in a wheel chair he turns and wheels his chair around to near his bed, as we look around the room there are pictures of all his drawings.
Close up- we see him wheel his wheel chair to the side and lay back on his bed and grab a comic book from his side. Its an action hero comic book, (name of comic book – genero the force of good - )
BRENDON
Action hero. How cool.
As he is laying on his bed he flips threw a few pages he his holding up above him, where he looks close up the action hero “genoro the force of good –
BRENDON
The hero always saves the day
He continues to flip threw the comic book – close up he flips threw the pages where we see – close up the comic book here genero cuddles a pretty girl, brendon close up rubs his finger across the picture.
BRENDON
And always gets the girl. ( brendon huffs to himself)
We hear brendons mum from downstairs call out
INT. DOWNSTAIRS
Brendons mum is a stressed out mother ( but loving ) with a son in a wheel chair, whos father left them both. She loves her son – continues with the call out, we see her walk to the stairs and call up to brendan
INT. BRENDANS ROOM
We see Brendan still flipping threw the comic book pages laying on his bed with his bent wheel chair to his left
BRENDANS MUM (O.S)
Brendon don’t forget to take your medication.
Brendon still mumbles to himself. To him he doesn’t even want to think about being in a wheel chair he’s reading his comic book and wanting a different place in his life.
BRENDON
(to himself)
Superhero,..
He rubs his hand along the picture of pretty girl
BRENDAN
Pretty girls only in stories I guess .
Downstairs his mum calls out again
BRENDONS MUM (0.S)
Brendon
Brendon slaps the comic book on his ill felt paralized legs in frustration and calls back to his mum as he opens his nearby draw to the left
BRENDON
(frustrated)
okay mum! Damn would you give me a break,
BRENDONS MUM (O.S)
What did I say?
BRENDON
Nothing mum just same thing you say and I do hundred times a day.
INT. DOWNSTAIRS
We see brendons mum holding onto the stairs with an ear up after she called - not understanding brandons frustration
BRENDONS MUM
Are you okay I’m coming up.
She begins to walk up the stairs
INT. BRENDONS ROOM
Brendon grabs close up blue pills out of his left draws and calls out to his mum
BRENDONS MUM
No its okay mum don’t worry about it… it .. its fine. Don’t worry okay , (to himself ) I’m taking my pills as I always do..
Brendon swallows 5 pills for his treatment of disablity
INT. DOWNSTAIRS
His mum submissivly pulls away from the stairs while sad
BRENDONS MUM
Okay well night… (son)
INT. UPSTIARS - BRENDONS ROOM
We see brendon scull a glass of water to finish his meds, ignoring to answer back his mum
INT. DOWNSTAIRS
We see brendons mum sit down put her hand in her hair then crack bottle of jack daniels and poor a DRINK
BRENDONS MUM
Fuck
INT. BRENDONS ROOM
PICKS up the comin book again but his vision of the comic book has gone funny from the drugs , as he looks at the blurry visions of the comic book he begins to pass out
BRENDON
(dazed)
super hero yer right, not me
he begins to pass out falls back and slapps the book on his stomach still open as he begins to pass out from the meds
BRENDON
Not mee..
We cut to a montage of brendons dreams as he appears in a scene with hot girls around him and he is standing with hot chicks around him as he taps his legs as he is stands
BRENDON
(to himself)
is this real?
A hot girl with lipstick extra strong walks past him
HOT GIRL
You better believe it baby…
BRENDON
Holy shit.
HOT GIRL
Wanna dance
BRENDON
Hell yeah
They begin to dance as they dance and brendon shakes his head and he sweating, he sweats more and more as the girl walks away
HOT GIRL
Whats wrong with you, eww
Brendon puts his arm out as he’s standing on the dance floor as everyone laughin at him on the dance floor, eww as people are pointing at him but he defends himself
BRENDON
Wait. Wait I can walk ,
He looks around as people laugh and point, in his head he hears eww ewww
BRENDON
(in his dream)
no stop stop… stop
he hears eww eww from the girls around him people pointing on the dance floor, even the disc jockey laughs at him
INT. BRENDONS ROOM
We see brendons eyes pof his eyes open in a blur
BRENDONS MUM
Are you… you .. okay.. brendon!
Brendon wakes up grabs his mums arms
BRENDON
(gasps)
BRENDONS MUM
Are you okay.. you were having a nightmare
Brendon sits up then looks over to the comic book flapping to the wind ( close up shows that hot girl from the book) he pushes his mum away
BRENDON
I’m fine mum
His mum gets up and walks to the door to go downstairs
BRENDON
Okay well come down when your ready breakfast is scrambled eggs your favourite
Brendon sits on the bed not answering, his mum concerned
BRENDONS MUM
Are you sure your okay?
BRENDON
(cranky)
I said I was okay mum shit will you give me a break
BRENDONS MUM
Okay sun
She turns and away from brendon down the hall way she wipes her nose with a half tear.
We see Jacob sit up and scratch his head with sum remorse in what he , the way he just talked to his mum as he looks to the door but shes already gone as he hears her walk down the stairs.
He feels a bit sad as he sits up passing- wiping - the sweaty head from his brow
BRENDON
(to himself)
shit
he sits up proper - looks at his lifeless legs
BRENDON
(to himself)
why me?..
he looks at a nearby local nirvana picture
BRENDON
Not the only one okay good for you to say
He picks up his legs with some pain and brings them over the side of bed with some pain the pages of the comic book are swinging away from the wind but there is not much wind. Pages of the comic book are flapping away, brendon plants his legs over the side of the bed. He plants his feet down, he notices his calves are a bit bigger, is it just his imagination?
Close up - he feels his calves, they are a bit bitter and stronger,, close up he looks over and sees close up the super hero page is open with the comic book - his leg calv is big and strong. He looks down - his feet on the the cold wooden ground as close up he almost wiggles a toe but cant he gets cranky and closes the book
BRENDON
(to himself-sarcastic)
Yer right..
He jumps on his wheel chair and begins to wheel out as he looks back- the comic book again opens up to the super hero page he closed. As he stops and looks but then his mum calls again from down stairs
BRENDONS MUM
Brendon I’ts getting cold are you coming?
Brendon thinks to himself and looks at his legs again as he wheel chairs out of his bed room the camera pans to the comic book of the super hero standing in a strong stance , as the book is left open on his bed
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, this example was just off the bat
good starts, entertaining despite the spelling errors, zip it through a word processor and you're golden.