With my usual caveat: I prefer not to critique others' works...
There were some creative choices made, but strictly from a technical standpoint this short suffered from a few of the standard shortcomings, most of which may be attributed to your use of a DSLR.
First, the use of 35mm lenses makes paying attention to focus crucial. Despite this, a significant percentage of indie films suffer from image focus issues. Maybe some people like that "searching for focus" technique, but I find it distracting. Not everything you shot had issues, of course, but there were enough instances of it that I found myself thinking about that rather than your story.
Second, there were sound issues, particularly inside the building. I'll leave it at that, since you probably know what I'm referring to.
Third, as Ceolwulf said, the hand-held got to be a bit much -- again, to the point of distraction. DSLRs do not look good hand-held, IMO. They're too light weight, which just makes the footage look amateurish.
Having said all that, though, I did appreciate some of the creative choices you made in your shot selection. And some of the above is probably just a matter of personal taste anyway.
Congrats on getting it done!