http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UmwTRI0ttcE
heres my new one, enjoy (:
heres my new one, enjoy (:
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watch Dos Samurai - Short Film
- Thread starter dehorse
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Uhhhh, hehehehe.
Dude, you need to make a live-action Beavis and Butthead. These two were born for the parts.
Otherwise, are you looking for critique, or are you just sharing? I realize it's just a skit, but I think it could benefit from more of a narrative structure (read=script). Also, a four-minute movie should not have a forty-five-second opening-title sequence.
I am Cornholio! Are you threatening me?
Dude, you need to make a live-action Beavis and Butthead. These two were born for the parts.
Otherwise, are you looking for critique, or are you just sharing? I realize it's just a skit, but I think it could benefit from more of a narrative structure (read=script). Also, a four-minute movie should not have a forty-five-second opening-title sequence.
I am Cornholio! Are you threatening me?
Yea need to plan dialogue. Something like:
Furry hat: Really?.....Really??
Sweat shirt: What?
Furry Hat: Well, first of all, that isn't even a samurai weapon. If anything, it's a ninja's tool. A samurai would never touch that, much less use it as a weapon. I really don't understand what you were thinking. You knew we were heading out to do battle and all of a sudden you want to be a ninja.
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Now he's eatin ya raaaw! ( i did enjoy that line)
Furry hat: Really?.....Really??
Sweat shirt: What?
Furry Hat: Well, first of all, that isn't even a samurai weapon. If anything, it's a ninja's tool. A samurai would never touch that, much less use it as a weapon. I really don't understand what you were thinking. You knew we were heading out to do battle and all of a sudden you want to be a ninja.
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Now he's eatin ya raaaw! ( i did enjoy that line)
this seems like the climax to a longer film. Without some story it's just a scene. The last shot lingered a little too long for me. You and your friends were just having fun, and that's basically what it looks like. Keep going, it is an interesting start, but there's plenty of room to grow; plot, story, dialogue, cinematography, ect.