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Dark Wings - Horror Short Film

The setting is great. Loved the dripping water, too. Some nice shots - looking up the shaft, receding shadows, and the soft focus wing in the foreground. I liked the vests and hard hats, especially the hat falling on the ground.

I have mixed feelings about the bird. I would have rather you didn't use something as common as that. A little more mystery could have taken that further. The character interaction was weak. We don't get much of a feel for them. It might have been better to have the girl being hesitant about going into a dark place, and the guy really needing to convince her to go in. Their voices could have been more clear, but not too bad.

This has a lot of potential to be expanded into something bigger. Good job.
 
The setting is great. Loved the dripping water, too. Some nice shots - looking up the shaft, receding shadows, and the soft focus wing in the foreground. I liked the vests and hard hats, especially the hat falling on the ground.

I have mixed feelings about the bird. I would have rather you didn't use something as common as that. A little more mystery could have taken that further. The character interaction was weak. We don't get much of a feel for them. It might have been better to have the girl being hesitant about going into a dark place, and the guy really needing to convince her to go in. Their voices could have been more clear, but not too bad.

This has a lot of potential to be expanded into something bigger. Good job.
Thanks for watching! I really appreciate the feedback to, it was really good of you to do that man.
 
I like the camera movement. Smooth and professional. Editing was good too. You managed to create some tension with the soundtrack. Yeah, I liked it. I agree that the bird was probably a little less frightening than what I was imagining. That's the thing about letting people use their imagination before revealing the monster. I was imagining a CHUD or maybe an old witch or even a good 'ol fashion monster, but a bird? Nah, they aren't scary. Also, I feel the colors outside of the cave are too saturated. Run a test. Desaturate the colors and see if you agree. I like your film. Keep up the good work!
 
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