criticise my movie production intro

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8salacious9

so as the title says, can you criticise it, do you like it, dont you, what could i do to make it better, is it good, is it absolutely rubbish and should have been shot at birth etc..

please rate audio and video, i realise i should make the sound fade out at the end il work on that.

http://youtu.be/U1ZK7N0t_og

thank you for any comments.

also if you can rate it out of ten for audio and video separately.
 
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I'm just going to give you my opinion, as I'm not qualified to give a number rating.

I like the idea of it. But I think it ends too abruptly. Also I don't like that the birds on the sides don't fit fully in frame.

My 2 cents
 
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Jeff Troiano said:
I'm just going to give you my opinion, as I'm not qualified to give a number rating.

I like the idea of it. But I think it ends too abruptly. Also I don't like that the birds on the sides don't fit fully in frame.

My 2 cents
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ok so a better transition out, and make the birds fit in frame.

thanks for taking the time.
 
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I am not sure what kind of films you will be making, but that made me feel like I was about to see the opening sequence of a first person shooter game kind of like Syphon Filter.


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Your music also seems like it cuts short too early.
 
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I agree in regards to the cropped birds. Not sure why anyone would want to crop a logo. Composition -wise, it presents an open form leaving people to speculate beyond the imagery you've provided...which, in this particular case, you really don't want. You want a clear-cut brand. I don't really care for the palette. I don't think you need to move the birds once they've 'assembled', but I do like the water effect of the text. The music seems to fit the mood you've established with both your imagery and the definition of 'salacious'.
 
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The sound/music implies low budget retro sci-fi/horror. If that's what you intended to communicate then you've done well. You need to watch out for the low frequency content though, it will probably overload the sub for anyone listening with a home cinema systems and you also need to have a look at the very end, which sounds like overload distortion.

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The swaying back and forth feels too smooth to me for the rest of the look the logo has going on... I would also second resting on the final image for a little longer to let it emblazon itself in your audiences retinas a bit ;) Perhaps making an inverse persistence of vision image when it cuts to black on the next one.
 
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I don't like that wobbly animation part at all. Is that the spherise effect? Just looks weird moving a lot in the middle, and not so much at the extremities.

Maybe have a duplicate layer scale up & fade out (after the initial materialisation), while the original layer fades out? Echoey. I dunno.

Meh, just my opinion.
 
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