I'm writing a spec script and I could use some advice on my headers. I'm doing the best I can with lessons from books and advice from the internet, but I still feel like I'm wandering around in the dark. Below, I've provided a Cliff's Notes version of the results. Is it coherent? Does it flow? What about the part where she scratches her head. Am I putting that in the right place? Your advice and input would be appreciated.
I want to begin with a shot of a car sitting in a parking lot, then cut to an interior shot of the guy sitting in the driver's seat. He makes a phone call to another character and we cut to her answering. Then we cut back to him for his line of dialogue. After that, it's back to her again for one last line of dialogue and her hanging up the phone. Finally, we cut back to him for a reaction shot.
EXT.PARKING LOT - NIGHT
A car idles.
INT.CAR - CONTINUOUS
MAN sits behind wheel of car. He picks up his phone.
INT. APARTMENT - NIGHT
WOMAN sits on couch, watches TV. Her phone rings and she answers
INTERCUT -- PHONE CONVERSATION
She scratches her head
Woman ends the call.
Man reacts silently, puts his phone down.
I want to begin with a shot of a car sitting in a parking lot, then cut to an interior shot of the guy sitting in the driver's seat. He makes a phone call to another character and we cut to her answering. Then we cut back to him for his line of dialogue. After that, it's back to her again for one last line of dialogue and her hanging up the phone. Finally, we cut back to him for a reaction shot.
EXT.PARKING LOT - NIGHT
A car idles.
INT.CAR - CONTINUOUS
MAN sits behind wheel of car. He picks up his phone.
INT. APARTMENT - NIGHT
WOMAN sits on couch, watches TV. Her phone rings and she answers
INTERCUT -- PHONE CONVERSATION
WOMAN
Dialogue 1 dialogue 1 dialogue 1.
MAN
Dialogue 2 dialogue 2 dialogue 2.
She scratches her head
WOMAN
Dialogue dialogue 3 dialogue 3.
Woman ends the call.
Man reacts silently, puts his phone down.
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