I wrote a scene.
I would like to know if I am doing it correctly? Too flowery, not enough......just some feedback.
Just want to make sure I get my point across without saying too much or am I saying too little?
Tell me what I need to do differently in order to do it right.. that's what I'm asking --- I think???
It's a very short little scene. No dialogue. It is also an opening scene.
I would like to know if I am doing it correctly? Too flowery, not enough......just some feedback.
Just want to make sure I get my point across without saying too much or am I saying too little?
Tell me what I need to do differently in order to do it right.. that's what I'm asking --- I think???
It's a very short little scene. No dialogue. It is also an opening scene.
FADE IN:
EXT. SOME ARKANSAS CREEK - EARLY MORNING
A long winding creek snakes it way through dense brush cutting it's own path through the forest.
Sounds of crickets, howling coyotes and water spills create a picturesque landscape. A water snake lazily glides toward shore.
The sun rises higher and sparkles through the water creating dancing reflections of the shoreline.
The morning mist recedes just enough to reveal a lone white hand bobbing beneath the water, long since trapped by the vehicle that the creek has claimed as it's own.
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