Almost halfway and I need some feedback

[bilinguru]

I've got 45 pages so far and feel I'm on to something, but I'd like some input.
There are a couple of typos in there which I found after converting the file to pdf from Final Draft format, so please excuse them (pgs. 34 and 38, I think.) I'm pretty secure about format, and am really eager to hear if the story is paced well, the dialog rings true and the narrative has a voice, but I welcome ANY comments at all.

Please go to

http://docs.google.com/fileview?id=0B8IjRKGeV9lIMmVhZmJiNGItNzkzNC00MzI2LTk3NTctY2RmYjgyMGNiNzk2&hl=en

Thanks in advance,

 

[Ccolebrook]

Says the page isn't available. Did you take it down? Is it not publicly viewable?

 

[bilinguru]

Really? The link seems to work OK for me. Please try again. I would love to attach it, but the site doesn't allow that.

Try this one

https://docs.google.com/fileview?id=0B8IjRKGeV9lIMmVhZmJiNGItNzkzNC00MzI2LTk3NTctY2RmYjgyMGNiNzk2&hl=en[
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[arrodiii]

Bilinguru, please try again as the second link doesn't work

 

[bilinguru]

Sorry for the hassle everyone.
I had the privacy settings wrong.
Anyway, please try the following...

https://docs.google.com/fileview?id...zUtYjE1OC00N2M5LTkxOTYtNDg5ZmMyM2YyNzUz&hl=en