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Thanks for the review Do you mean that the guy should have a good reason NOT to argue? But he does. He appeals. About the wife, you mean she should meet the guy and offer him something that will give him a reason to take the blame on himself?

I don't know what are you trying to say. Are you saying that rich jews would hate this story? Or that every jew eventually becomes rich? Anyway, what do you think I should improve in my story?

I won't hate anything you'll write. I believe in freedom of self-expression. I just don't see how is this Israeli style. :) The most ironic thing is that everyone in Israel who see what I write, tell me that I should stop trying to write in Hollywood style. Moreover, they tell me to stop...

A prophet who can see only his own future, and only an hour forward, must stop his son, an ISIS activist, from blowing up a crowded mall. "Fate or Free Will", - this is the idea of the story. Two sides of a coin represent two choices given by fate, while "Edge of the Coin" is what represents a...

That's inspiring, but I'm sure the story is far from perfect :) Do you have any suggestions or critique?

Thanks for the review. About the trial, this is how the trial process happens. The officer, the charged person, and the Master Sergeant, no matter if he was the victim or not. As someone who served in the army, I know that soldiers not always respect their superiors. Eastern mentality, you...

Edge of the Coin - Synopsis Avi is a prophet who works for the police and knows that there is no "free will" - people can choose from the given options, but all the outcomes of whatever they choose are predestined. Avi himself can see no more than one hour into the future, and only his own...

Yes, that's what comes before the Children of Dune? My intention is to make the protagonist affect his son's choice, make him choose NOT to blow up the mall, which would in turn cancel the protag's need to choose between his son and all the people in the mall. His son has a good reason to blow...

Yes, this is close to that idea. The difference is that in my idea the protagonist sees 2 possible outcomes of his own choices, and he can choose one of them. No other options. I'll post the synopsis soon.

A prophet who can see only his own future, and only an hour forward, must stop his son, an ISIS activist, from blowing up a crowded mall. Premise: In a fatalistic world where free will is nothing but choosing from the given options, and every choice's outcome is predestined, a prophet who can...

AmateurD, if you don't write this story some day, I will ;) P.S. Why is it easier for me to give ideas to others, than finding ideas for myself? :huh: I guess my teacher, like everybody else in this world, have a genre or a direction in movies they don't like. Personally, I don't like...

Why not? What about an alternative idea? Something fantastic/mystic He buys a video cam, and finds a video of his own murder. Now he knows what's going to happen to him in the future, and must prevent it. What do you think?

A badly disciplined soldier struggles to prove his innocence against his Master Sergeant, after the latter has judged him for 20 days in military prison for a theft he didn't commit. This story happens entirely in a military base, so please forgive me for bad military slang (or lack of military...

I like it. How will he convince her that life is worth living? FantasySciFi, well, the same thing my teacher says about Sci-Fi and fantasy :D

A guy who works in Data Recovery service for mobile phones (or laptops), one day gets a laptop/phone of a famous married actress to recover, and finds there video of her having sex with another man. He and his friend decide to make some money out of it - to sell the materials to the media. A...

I disagree with you. Character with multiple personalities ARE used in movies. Maybe not every 2nd movie you see, but yes, used. Some times it is interesting, some times it isn't. It doesn't have to be about mind diseases or shizos. Maybe a division in 2 personalities is not a healthy thing, but...

I don't know what is MK Ultra mind control (some kind of experiment?), but it sounds like a good character, as long as there are not too many characters within him. I would suggest no more than 3, and that in addition to the TV/film characters they represent, each of them also represents one of...

Aren't there already many such videos of April 1st jokes? :) Anyway, it will either be very bad or very good, but it won't leave the audience without talking about it :) And if I take it seriously, I think I don't need the sick spouse. I've seen SOOO desperate screenwriters that will do...

I've thought of that, and decided to quit the idea of making the "world where women dominate" thing. It's very difficult to write, and to find actors to play all that (in my opinion). Although it's a very interesting challenge, I have a very tight deadline, so I will keep this challenge for...

PhantomScreenwriter, ok thanks, I'll think of something