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I think you need to elaborate on the motivations of your character, both internally and externally.

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Does the set up create intrigue? Is there anything that is off? I care less about grammatical stuff

180 rule is broken. There doesnt appear to be a clear story. The colors are appealing. I think the problems are with the concept of space and moving the camera with motivation rather than for the sake of movement. The audience never wants to feel disoriented, so a few adjustments and youre golden.

I am going to throw out some of my recent favorites: Portrait of a lady on fire (hulu) A serious man (Netflix) The road to perdition (Netflix) West World (HBO series) What are some recommendations?

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Idk how likely a dad of a 5 year old who almost got raped would willing go to a strip club where women are constantly looked at as sexual objects. Also. There needs to be one over arching concept. If you want it to be the fight then it's the fight. It cant be the fight and the class and this or...

The action needs to be simpler, less blocks of text. The dialogue a bit more snappy, less drawn out. I'd remove Trump because it feels too out of left field. Similar vibes to the good place on nbc.

Portrait of a lady on fire A-

Is there any weak points? Is the ending rushed?

Looking for feedback on some of my work before I submit to festivals. Also up to talk film and Tv.