I posted the outline last week and people really liked it!
Plot: Eleven year old Lily is celebrating christmas when her family is attacked by the mafia, sending her life spiraling out of control.
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There are some elements that will be amazing on screen.
Like forcing the family to sit there watching their loved one have a heart attack and being helpless to do anything.
But I feel like it doesn't really come across very powerful in the script yet it will come off powerful on screen.
Screenplays just dont embellish those sort of feelings, you state the facts and you move on writing right?
Could I handle the heart attack better on paper?
I found the whole home invasion scene surprisingly difficult to write effectively.
Plot: Eleven year old Lily is celebrating christmas when her family is attacked by the mafia, sending her life spiraling out of control.
[EDIT: LINK REMOVED]
There are some elements that will be amazing on screen.
Like forcing the family to sit there watching their loved one have a heart attack and being helpless to do anything.
But I feel like it doesn't really come across very powerful in the script yet it will come off powerful on screen.
Screenplays just dont embellish those sort of feelings, you state the facts and you move on writing right?
Could I handle the heart attack better on paper?
I found the whole home invasion scene surprisingly difficult to write effectively.
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