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    critique Feedback - Plot Development for a Love Short Story

    Yes, that's the idea of reuniting them later...they are so consumed by the fear that they forgot how to live... the old couple is approaching 90's .. essentially the old man is on his death bed so its really just a final good bye
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    critique Feedback - Plot Development for a Love Short Story

    As mentioned scenes are misplaced and formatting is a problem .. I will deal with that later...it doesn't change the story which is what i am trying to iron out.
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    critique Feedback - Plot Development for a Love Short Story

    Thanks for the awesome feedback ... I am well on my way with a major rewrite: To your points: 1) I will add a scene prior to him driving around ...visiting his elderly mom who is finishing off a painting of a landscape scene (similar to the one in the yard sale) ... he sees some old...
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    critique Feedback - Plot Development for a Love Short Story

    I thought about adding a scene before he comes into the yard sale: Muriel is painting outside the nursing home and her son visits him. She is nearly finished it and doesn't have a frame. He tells her he will keep his eyes open for one.... Then I can have a logline such as: "A son finds a...
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    critique Feedback - Plot Development for a Love Short Story

    Hello friends, I am writing an original short story and would love some feedback. I know the formatting needs work, and the scenes are misplaced in places, but I will fix that in future revisions. What I am wondering is how to improve the STORY. I was hoping to make it a 10 minute short but I...
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    format Science Fiction Screenplay - A Short Story

    Just reading your posts brings me back to that terrible time. She used the strategy of wearing me down and it worked. There's literally thousands of fathers that have gone through similar hell so unfortunately this is not new :( ... Yeah the stress... I was refued life insurance because my...
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    format Science Fiction Screenplay - A Short Story

    Thanks! They say we can tolerate (at most) a couple of bad things happening at once, but when too many problems start to compound, the body literally shuts down. I guess we all have to go through moments like that once or twice in a lifetime. ...What doesn't kill you ...
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    format Science Fiction Screenplay - A Short Story

    My heart goes out to you, my friend. I too went through a difficult period a few years ago when my ex re-married and moved our daughter to another city a few hours away. Long story, but let's just say there was a lot of betrayal and deception on her part and I was caught like a deer in...
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    format Science Fiction Screenplay - A Short Story

    Amazing ... Do you have any personal YouTube channel or something like this with online tutorials?
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    format Science Fiction Screenplay - A Short Story

    I seriously could not have done this without your guidance... You are a wonderful teacher ...
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    format Science Fiction Screenplay - A Short Story

    I wrote a short page that will become episode 2 in the series, trying to better incorporate your ideas into it. Is this better?
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    format Science Fiction Screenplay - A Short Story

    This is so gracious of you ... Thank you so much !!!! I am never seen such sage advice compacted in so few words. As I read through my story now I cringe ... in a good way (if that makes sense) You, sir, are a true gift to writers on this forum ...
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    format Science Fiction Screenplay - A Short Story

    I removed quite a bit ... Seems to read better...I will keep refining this. Thank you
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    format Science Fiction Screenplay - A Short Story

    This is wonderful. I will redo with the advice given and repost here ... Thank you so so so much!!
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