For my last feature, which got proofread I got mixed opinions of how to write a scene change.
Here's a sample:
"EXT. MOUNTAIN ROAD, LAURENTIEN MOUNTAINS, QUEBEC -- DAY
A car drives up the road to the top.
There is a building on top of the mountain and the car pull up in front of it, next to two other parked cars --
There is a man standing in front of the building looking around below to other places in his view --
The two men exit the car and walk up to the building --
One gives a certain type of knock on the door, to indicate that it's them, and they of them walk in --
INT. BUILDING -- DAY
They open the door and there are two men already inside.
TRUDEAU, 58, is standing near the door, to see who comes in --
MANNING, 25, is sitting in chair, tired and nervous --
On the floor is SALINA, 35, tied up and gagged, with a hood tied around her eyes --
EXT. CONVENIENCE STORE -- DAY
The store is on another lower mountain away from the other.
A cop car pulls up and an LIEUTENANT TYLER BLACK, 28, of the Surete du Quebec Police Force, gets out --
He looks at the nice view of the mountain with the building and notices the cars parked in front --
He then walks into the store, while staring at it --"
I was told that I should put EXT. BUILDING DAY in between the firs two lines, but then another script writer with experience told me no, and that would look amature, if it's not necessary. Not just was this scene but with other scenes throughout that share the same example.
Also when the scene changes to a store on top of another mountain, did I change the scene right or do I have to describe that it's nearby in the scene heading, rather than the description? I would guess no, but wanna be sure. Thanks.
Here's a sample:
"EXT. MOUNTAIN ROAD, LAURENTIEN MOUNTAINS, QUEBEC -- DAY
A car drives up the road to the top.
There is a building on top of the mountain and the car pull up in front of it, next to two other parked cars --
There is a man standing in front of the building looking around below to other places in his view --
The two men exit the car and walk up to the building --
One gives a certain type of knock on the door, to indicate that it's them, and they of them walk in --
INT. BUILDING -- DAY
They open the door and there are two men already inside.
TRUDEAU, 58, is standing near the door, to see who comes in --
MANNING, 25, is sitting in chair, tired and nervous --
On the floor is SALINA, 35, tied up and gagged, with a hood tied around her eyes --
EXT. CONVENIENCE STORE -- DAY
The store is on another lower mountain away from the other.
A cop car pulls up and an LIEUTENANT TYLER BLACK, 28, of the Surete du Quebec Police Force, gets out --
He looks at the nice view of the mountain with the building and notices the cars parked in front --
He then walks into the store, while staring at it --"
I was told that I should put EXT. BUILDING DAY in between the firs two lines, but then another script writer with experience told me no, and that would look amature, if it's not necessary. Not just was this scene but with other scenes throughout that share the same example.
Also when the scene changes to a store on top of another mountain, did I change the scene right or do I have to describe that it's nearby in the scene heading, rather than the description? I would guess no, but wanna be sure. Thanks.