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- Thread starter PassionPulp
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This is really a super adaptation of your earlier story into a more visual script. I know I've nagged in the past, but I am REALLY impressed. This script is something that makes the actions, locations, and characters stand out visually and believably. There are still a few things that could be improved, but format-wise this is much more shootable. Reading it,
series of camera shots formed in my mind.
Good job!
series of camera shots formed in my mind.
Good job!
I appreciate it greatly.
I was almost afraid that criticism would go towards the irrelevance of the storyline.
I see it as a softcore surrealist horror. So there's a reason to the uncertainty of the plot.
The problem that keeps me from advancing the story is the dialogue.
But I'll keep adding. I've got much more.
I was almost afraid that criticism would go towards the irrelevance of the storyline.
I see it as a softcore surrealist horror. So there's a reason to the uncertainty of the plot.
The problem that keeps me from advancing the story is the dialogue.
But I'll keep adding. I've got much more.