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mussonman said:
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Indeed. :hmm:

Like most of your material, you have a genuinely good setup weighed down with extra baggage.

Cut that down to 30 seconds, start to finish. Keep the core of it; comedy comes in threes.

Dunno what to suggest for new title, but yes... it needs a new one.
 
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