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What do you think?

Half your film is slow-scrolling end credits. Knock that off.

Fight choreography's rather good. Lighting alternated between interesting to just dark. Needed consistency. Hopefully at the interesting end.

The night-vision binoculars (with those green orbs rotoscoped on) looked pretty dodgy. Also, the actual looking-through-the-binocs looked a bit off. The objects being viewed just didn't really come across as being far away. Yeah, I know binocs are supposed to make them look close... but they don't look really zoomed in. If that makes sense.

I'm assuming this is a to-be-continued short? Didn't have much of a conclusion.

Oh, the camerawork was pretty good, too.
 
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