Mr. Daisy seemed to cover a bit of it already, but I'll write some of the things I see right off the bat. This is to help you grow, not to put you down.
-Put some music or sound in at the begining, it really downs the quality.
-You can hear the ambient change in sound from cut to cut.
-The car cut speeding off to pulling in is a jump cut, and is odd to watch.
-Your colors are extremely off from shot to shot, try learning about color correction, it can help a ton.
-When you see shots of pictures, the sound is bad, like the actor was talking from behind the camera mic, and the pans are not fluid.
-Theres a lot of jump cuts with extreme color changes which are just very uneasy to look at.
-The story seemed like you were jumping from one thing to another, and didnt flow well.
-Transitions were really bad, and didnt flow well, they just sort of jumped to the next subject.
-I could also tell at the end that it was made by one person because of the bad VO for the ghost.
Hopefully some of this helps and you can fix your mistakes on the next project.