I watched. Want an honest comment? My 2 cents...
The use of 8mm for visual imagery was good & clever. With interior shots 'warm' & dark, exterior shots 'cold' & bright. Out door footage would have been better if you added some exterior audio ambience, (maybe traffic diminishes as story advances). Try reducing the musical soundtrack some. Build it up.
Pace of edit would improve the anxiety within your story. The ending was NO surprise! If the victim turned out to be the 'slasher' would have been a better twist. Or, the slasher was followed by another 'slasher', or the victim turned out to be non-human, or the victim turned out to be something other than just a 'weak' character with no history for the viewer to hold on to, (and obviously no future). Need a more startling 'slasher'. Go beyond the 2009 Dunstan's The Collector & 2012's The Collection costuming. Shock us with something NEW.
Be MORE surprising! Develop more of a shock with a bigger build up, as in DePalma's Dressed To Kill elevator scene. NOT EXPECTED. Or just check out The Most Terrifying Scenes in Horror Movie History... and then YOU try to vision something fresh & original. Laughing, think of somrthing NO ONE would expect, Hitchcock's shower scene in Psycho, Coppola's Dementia 13, Craven's Scream, etc., at least with the 1968 Boston Strangler, you got the casting of Tony Curtis (a Hollywood heartthrob cast as the 'strangler')... with some suspense... but that WAS 1968! There have been a lot of slasher movies since then.
So learn & improve. GO for a bigger pay off in the end. You have the story in you! Just gotta find it. AND don't get your actors shot by a passing by vigilante on public access, city streets!
