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story Story : 'Sparkle'

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joejohn123

Guy of teenage and middle aged woman(mother ) in stage hall standing side of the stage , watching the students practicing.

Mom-'honey, Would you mind if I go and check if her class is over.'
guy-ya
mom-' Are you sure ...?'
guy-' ya mom .... pleaseeeeeeee'

mom-'ok, i'll be back soon'

she leaves.


students practicing...

Person in dialogue uttering passionate masculine words ....
after a while ...
every body end the practice and leave.
teen Guy is watching (?) them.

hall is Silence . Making sure every body left.

teen guy Moves a bit , his hands are seeking while walking, comes to open stage,

Start to utter the same passionate and masculine word he had heard...
EMPTY Hall echoes..becomes quite ,feels great.. Now thinks about perfecting it and keeps himself busy in uttering those words...
while then , door opens and enters a guy of mid 40(play teacher) , walks near to the stage from audience section...

TEACHER-'NOT BAD'
GUY SUDDENLY STOPS.

teacher-'person who is saying these word has to be proud ... confident..and confirmed about thought and made decision...'

guy doesn't say anything....

teacher-'I really liked the voice tone. Your voice really spoke ... I mean it!!
Teacher continues, ' but, your body language seems so pathetic and confused...
come on keep it stiff and confident......'

Guy doesn't know what to say!!

teacher standing in audience section ,'I mean , keep your body stiff .. lift your face ... say it with confidence
.... like having confirmed grip on thought ...'


Guy stiffening his posture , lifting his face , utters those words like a experienced one.

teacher quite for a while,clapps ..stops..
'wow , NEVER EXPECTED that level of excellence at one go .' Well , kid you hatched it right !! and the right one!!'

Guy is overwhelmed,
Teacher continues,'It might not be movie shooting , but just a stage act....audience get to see your act right or not , still, never forget the importance of Sparkle in the eyes...
And you had it.'

Mom suddenly enters calling his name from side of the stage,
mom-'Ya, I met her ... '
mom holding his hand leading him towards back of the stage....

GUY-'bye sir'

Teacher speechless looking at blind guy ...

Mom in hurry acknowledges without knowing anything leads him and take him with her .

Guy with mom walking in the campus ,

Guy-'Mom'

mom-'ya honey'
guy - ' what does sparkle mean?'

Mom-' come on ! you don't know what sparkle mean? ,shine , glow...'

guy-'I know mom...but, what does sparkle in the eyes mean?'

mom-'sparkle in the eyes means...'
suddenly stops.

guy-'That guy in stage hall said , I got a sparkle in the eyes...'

mom quite....

Guy-' does it look good ,if any one had it... you know like being handsome...'

mom-'yes honey , you got that sparkle, you are good looking .... come'

mom kisses him,

guy-' come on mom , just stop it....'

mom -'ok, lets go'

Both leave the campus.

(Not necessary guy should be shown as blind in the beginning, I felt so .Ya the way he moves to the center of the stage , should be taken care.)



story cliche?
fuck you ass holes.
It is perfect !!!
just kidding .
may be cliche .I still love it.
I think I have hatched the right one !!
lol
 
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photon said:
Dude, write using the proper screenplay format and post a link to a pdf. Get a free screenwriting software like Celtx or Adobe Story.
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Do you really think it is worthy making movie.
I lack the experience.
Would you mind to help me write script on this story.
co-writer ?
for free !!?
offer is open for all . If any one want to , PM.
 
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joejohn123 said:
Do you really think it is worthy making movie.
I lack the experience.
Would you mind to help me write script on this story.
co-writer ?
for free !!?
offer is open for all . If any one want to , PM.
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Maybe or maybe not. Photon was speaking in general that you should put your ideas into a readable screenplay format. It's difficult to read and understand what you are trying to get across. There's a reason for why screenplays are put into the format they are put into... so they can be understood. I've heard some of your ideas, but no one would "purchase" them because A) ideas aren't copyrightable, so anyone could use them and B) it's not an actual script.

You can gain experience by watching free online tutorials and reading books on filmmaking.
 
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That was very informative.
I think the same.
thank you for that. may be I should concentrate on screen writing format.
better i think about discussing my ideas after perfecting screen writing.
If possible , I'll return to same site when matured to be part of movie industry.
may be 5 to 7 years later. may be to irritate you guys less than this time !!!
Well, It was nice being here .
any way thanks.Best of luck for each and every one
bye guys.NJOY LIFE.
 
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