watch Sketch Comedy - Loose Lunch

[planetrain]

Another day in Beverly Hills, enjoying a quiet lunch. Explore post-meal traditions around the world.

This is my first sketch comedy video, formerly I'm used to shooting music videos/live concerts, so narrative is new to me. Feedback is welcome and appreciated!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=I9TYsqYREAY

 

[Murdock]

Not to be mean, but it really wasn't funny. The British portion looked far too Mediteranean. The French cafe looked pretty good.

Maybe it would have been more funny if the different characters were more over-the-top. Then they each order something, using pure local jargon, and when its brought out, its the same thing for all three???

Hello and Welcome BTW

 

[chilipie]

I thought the Beverly Hills one was quite funny, but the others not so much. (Though the British tabloid he held up at the end was a nice touch.) You must have an "Olde Irishe Pub" or something that looks more British than the location you used?

 

[ThatGuyFromThatPlace]

The comedy was too subtle for it to be noticeable. I think more contrast between the scenes would have created the humor needed - like having the first scene be completely polite, even throw in a monocle or pristine clean location (as is stereotypical of rich people's houses) and then in the following scene start it off with "meanwhile..." and then show a bunch of white guys in a car at a McDonald's drive in shouting their orders to the man in the window. As is, the scenes just seem to be conforming too subtlely to their stereotypes - for comedy, stereotypes tend to work best when exaggerated completely.

Like the way they show the British in this video:
http://youtu.be/UWQoK506xkQ

 

[AndrewLee]

...show a bunch of white guys in a car at a McDonald's drive in shouting their orders to the man in the window.

That would have been an awesome touch

On topic though, I thought it was pretty funny. Like others said the first too weren't quite as funny as the last but it's all just part of the learning process.

Keep it up!