Script Help C0-writer

[benj09]

Hello I have the first two chapters of my Screenplay "Pocket Watch" its set in the future when the world has been destroyed by war and the threat of alien invasion is looming. A man who has been scientifically modified, has been called up to save the world. He must run back through time and save A 5 year old girl, because when that girl grows up she will be the creator of a protection system that will allow earth to stay blue and green. IF some body could just have a read through it and tell me if its looking good. and maybe give me some hints and tips i would gladly Give co-writer credits.

Thankyou

 

[Lord of Light]

Hmm, sounds interesting. If you want I can look it over for you. Send it to me at dselleck88@yahoo.com. I'll be glad to help.

 

[countevil]

Not wanting to be rude, but that sounds like exactly like terminator. With the machines replaced by aliens.

 

[Smith]

^
Thats exactly what I thought. It's a good idea for a film, but it's been done.

 

[indietalk]

That is Terminator. Sorry.

 

[TheBuck]

maybe WE are the aliens!
"What a twist!"

 

[Lord of Light]

Not wanting to be rude, but that sounds like exactly like terminator. With the machines replaced by aliens.

With a mix of Riddick in there. But still, maybe all he needs is a second opinion to get the wheels rolling.