First of all, great job! The only thing that really jumped out at me was that the audio needs to be cleaned-up, but you of course mentioned that no post work has been done, and I assume that will be on the slate.
Funny thing -- I actually like it without the missing footage that was originally intended to be in the middle. Of course I might change my mind, if I were to see that glorious CG-dino-footage, but as is, I think this incomplete 10-minutes could serve nicely as a set-up for the craziness. Which will of course follow, in either a complete feature film, or a series.
The way you've got it edited here, it's kinda like the beginning of Hangover. Boys get together for a bachelor party. Skip-forward in time to the next morning, and obviously all sorts of craziness has happened. We don't yet know what happened, but we'll figure it out.
Same thing with your movie/pilot. I think a jump-forward in time might be a fun way of hinting to the audience what is to come. If you were to choose to do this type of thing, I would stay far away from exposition. The beginning of Hangover is so great because the characters are just as lost as the audience.
Not sure if any of these comments are even relevant, but I hope they help. I'm a believer in what you're doing!
