archived-videos Rain - Original 4 min Short By a 16 yr old

[Quiltom]

So here's my first complete take at making a short with no budget at all Its all original and the script was hand crafted by me only , the music is also mine , I've made several shorts before , Learnt from the mistakes and will always look upon to improve my skills , So yeah Its been a while and I've been posting trailers of this movie which have faced criticism as well as appreciation , So here it is finally ! So go on guys watch this lil movie of mine , And I would say this short doesn't have a story , Like it isn't story based , More of a character driven mash up haha , Anyway so yeah criticism is always accepted , and c'mon guys ! comment + Share + Like ! Thanks
Special thanks to @Metal Renard for doing that awesome voice over which made this short work

So here's the link : http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ahrH4R0pGXk&list=UU8S2qJKtr-LTpdmpQMI0c-Q&index=1&feature=plcp

NOTE: The actors aren't professional, its their first movie :L

 

[rockerrockstar]

One thing I did not mention before I believe was that it kinda bugged me that the car he got out of did not match the Ferrari that it looks like he drives in other scenes. You show an interior shot and another shot of the door that dont match a Ferrari. Maybe cut those scenes and only show the scenes with the Ferrari.

Genre probably would be Action since it seems this will lead into action scenes sooner later all though nothing really happens in this short clip. Sub-catagory comic book. If you took this opener idea you have hear and added in some fight scenes and maybe a romance you would have something. Give it a 3 point arc. just a suggestion.

So far this is more of a teaser clip so far missing anything that really is needed to really tease like a short action clip at the end. Also, needs to give us an idea what the story is about.