archived-videos Promo Video

The crumbly beginning looks fine.
The camera work is... fine, just largely static and uninteresting.

The PROMO is for "Yurik And Danya... two mates in a post apocalyptic world, enjoying life as they now know it."
So, why is there only one dude at a time creeping around?
Where's the post apocalyptic world?
Where's the enjoying part in all the stoic peeping and creeping?

The ditty at the end is cute, and seems much more germane to the stated goal of the series, yet insufficient to achieve your goal, I believe.

Since Y&D will be about two mates enjoying life as they now know it consider making a promo that's... fun, but creepy.
This => http://www.indietalk.com/showthread.php?t=30979 in a post-A-world with gas masks, guns and mutants.
More daytime or dusk/dawn.
Less all night & in the dark.
 
@Rayw Thanks for your feedback, I always love hearing what people don't like rather then "Yeah, it's good" - Gives me more to work off and change in the next one.
Although, I didn't want to give too much away in the promo just something to pump people up for Ep1. Plus, we aren't 100% sure what we are going to make of it. Between me and my friend (The other guy helping) we both agree we work best without a plan. I have been mates with him sense grade 6 and I'm now 21 - So we know how each other thinks.

This is the first clip, movie, short, film What ever you call it I have written a script for. Never planed anything like this before so i'm finding it a learning curve at the moment.. Hopefully it will all come together nice and smooth and I can keep doing what I love to do.

Still, love the feedback.. Please keep it coming.
Once again Rayw.. Your a very valid member of this site they should give you free account upgrades or something haha.
 
Added Notes:

I I'm currently writing up a bigger info section for the page.. I didn't want to give away anything until the first Ep. The First ep will be intro'ing the characters and setting the scene.. This video was purely to get something on the page and get people mildly interested in the first Ep.

People on another thread helped me out with my script writing, so I have edited it up a lot and changed this around. Making ep1 more of a story line based intro.
 
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