Hi dear filmmakers,
I haven't been active on these forums for quite some time now and I'm glad to see you guys still jumpin and writing, filming and so forth.
I have an unfinished treatment of a short film I'm currently working on for my film college. Id' really like your honest opinion and critiques as to the story structure, characters etc. I know it has some flaws at the moment, however, with the right guidelines I can turn this into something very dramatic and beautiful.
Any flaws, confusions and questions that need answering, would be awesome.
Treatment: https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B89OlY2pP4fuOFcwR2VaYW42azJqQXRpVnZGQVA0UVpiWjI4/edit?usp=sharing
I usually would finish the story myself, but since peer pressure can be a b***h (from my professors) and the fact that I'm always fighting between "I have to finish this" vs. "I want to finish this", in other words, duty vs. love, these two keep contrasting, while I write, sometimes giving me a writers' block so I can't focus. So that's why I need your help on this one.
Thanks in advance,
Max
I haven't been active on these forums for quite some time now and I'm glad to see you guys still jumpin and writing, filming and so forth.
I have an unfinished treatment of a short film I'm currently working on for my film college. Id' really like your honest opinion and critiques as to the story structure, characters etc. I know it has some flaws at the moment, however, with the right guidelines I can turn this into something very dramatic and beautiful.
Any flaws, confusions and questions that need answering, would be awesome.
Treatment: https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B89OlY2pP4fuOFcwR2VaYW42azJqQXRpVnZGQVA0UVpiWjI4/edit?usp=sharing
I usually would finish the story myself, but since peer pressure can be a b***h (from my professors) and the fact that I'm always fighting between "I have to finish this" vs. "I want to finish this", in other words, duty vs. love, these two keep contrasting, while I write, sometimes giving me a writers' block so I can't focus. So that's why I need your help on this one.
Thanks in advance,
Max