Please enjoy and if you have questions or feedback it would be much appreciated. Thanks guys!
I liked the use of music, there was a nice range of shots that seem appropriate for the scene/setting, camera movement works really nicely too. I like the colour correction/grade and it felt fitting with the piece.
Only criticism is that I wasn't keen on the credits over the start of the film in the bottom left corner, I found it slightly distracting especially as they come on screen without a transition but it's not a big issue. Nothing wrong with the cut-to-black title, but the cast/crew listing at the start.
Good work and thanks for sharing!
Great job. This could do well on the festival circuit.
Great work! There were a few parts I felt cut too smoothly together. Right at 1:59, it goes from them standing to them sitting, and it was very abrupt. You might be able to change the color for that scene, so we know its in the kitchen rather than the front doorway.
Other than that, amazing quality short!
But maybe you were just talking about perhaps having a cutaway to the outside etc?
Thanks for sharing it!
As for my thoughts, I wouldn't even call it criticism... Just a feeling I got while watching at that particular point. At that time, the scene transition was so smooth. It made me think it was a mistake rather than intentional. Like maybe we missed them transitioning into the kitchen from the doorway. Almost of if the mother magically teleported somewhere.
The only real way to really fix that now would be some sort of b-roll, maybe of the little girl doing something in between, or maybe a shot of the house exterior. Or even a panning shot blocked by a cabinet or entryway into the kitchen where they were?
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But don't take that as me bashing the film, I liked it. It was very high quality. The actors did amazing, the color grading was excellent, and the lighting/angles worked wonderfully.
You probably know already that when you work on your own projects you are intimately familiar with them and likely take a lot of information for granted and forget the viewer may not know any of it and could be left confused.
Yup, I absolutely agree. That's why I always show the rough cut to as many people as I can to get feedback.
While I certainly don't use all of the suggestions/feedback - plenty of people contradict each other - I do look for areas where multiple people have the same questions or concerns.
This can happen with dialogue as well. You know all the words so can hear/understand them but to someone else parts may be unintelligible.