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watch My Shelter - New Short film - Drama short on GH5

I liked the use of music, there was a nice range of shots that seem appropriate for the scene/setting, camera movement works really nicely too. I like the colour correction/grade and it felt fitting with the piece.

Only criticism is that I wasn't keen on the credits over the start of the film in the bottom left corner, I found it slightly distracting especially as they come on screen without a transition but it's not a big issue. Nothing wrong with the cut-to-black title, but the cast/crew listing at the start.

Good work and thanks for sharing!
 
I liked the use of music, there was a nice range of shots that seem appropriate for the scene/setting, camera movement works really nicely too. I like the colour correction/grade and it felt fitting with the piece.

Only criticism is that I wasn't keen on the credits over the start of the film in the bottom left corner, I found it slightly distracting especially as they come on screen without a transition but it's not a big issue. Nothing wrong with the cut-to-black title, but the cast/crew listing at the start.

Good work and thanks for sharing!

Hi, Ronnie, thanks so much for watching. I made the opening credits fairly small to avoid that, but I will take note of it. If that is the only criticism I will be able to sleep at night 😎 Regarding the color grade, yes, I tried to keep within the tone of the film, thus the reason why it's somewhat desaturated. On music, I always battle with the amount of music. Sometimes you can tend to go overboard with it. My biggest battle is always time because I always feel somewhat rushed when we shoot because the locations are very limited with time and since you don't know how long it will actually take, you end up pushing through the scene that needed more care and time.

In any event, I really appreciate you watching and giving your feedback
 
Great work! There were a few parts I felt cut too smoothly together. Right at 1:59, it goes from them standing to them sitting, and it was very abrupt. You might be able to change the color for that scene, so we know its in the kitchen rather than the front doorway.

Other than that, amazing quality short!
 
Great work! There were a few parts I felt cut too smoothly together. Right at 1:59, it goes from them standing to them sitting, and it was very abrupt. You might be able to change the color for that scene, so we know its in the kitchen rather than the front doorway.

Other than that, amazing quality short!

Hi, thanks for watching and giving me notes. The cuts are more of an artistic choice, which I acknowledge can be jarring to some. I think over time of editing a TON of projects and things getting faster with respect to editing it works, but again, I know some people find it a tad too abrupt. When I first saw the show "The Amazing Race" it was cut so fast I couldn't follow it, but I got used to it and now most things seem slow. Kinda like what happened with Tic Tok, Snap Chat etc. That is the best explanation for why I have come to cut a bit quicker. But maybe you were just talking about perhaps having a cutaway to the outside etc?

Thanks again for watching it.
 
But maybe you were just talking about perhaps having a cutaway to the outside etc?

Thanks for sharing it!

As for my thoughts, I wouldn't even call it criticism... Just a feeling I got while watching at that particular point. At that time, the scene transition was so smooth. It made me think it was a mistake rather than intentional. Like maybe we missed them transitioning into the kitchen from the doorway. Almost of if the mother magically teleported somewhere.

The only real way to really fix that now would be some sort of b-roll, maybe of the little girl doing something in between, or maybe a shot of the house exterior. Or even a panning shot blocked by a cabinet or entryway into the kitchen where they were?

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But don't take that as me bashing the film, I liked it. It was very high quality. The actors did amazing, the color grading was excellent, and the lighting/angles worked wonderfully.
 
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Thanks for sharing it!

As for my thoughts, I wouldn't even call it criticism... Just a feeling I got while watching at that particular point. At that time, the scene transition was so smooth. It made me think it was a mistake rather than intentional. Like maybe we missed them transitioning into the kitchen from the doorway. Almost of if the mother magically teleported somewhere.

The only real way to really fix that now would be some sort of b-roll, maybe of the little girl doing something in between, or maybe a shot of the house exterior. Or even a panning shot blocked by a cabinet or entryway into the kitchen where they were?

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But don't take that as me bashing the film, I liked it. It was very high quality. The actors did amazing, the color grading was excellent, and the lighting/angles worked wonderfully.

Hi, I didn't even take it as a criticism and by the way, I take note of all feedback, good or bad and learn from it. It was more of an observation to me. I just of some edits like effects. For example one thing I tend to do a lot if do continued dialogue. For example, one character says: "I'm looking forward to it," then cut to another location where a new character says "is that so, huh?." It's more of a style and effect than anything else. Tarantino has a way of telling stories non-traditionally. I sometimes edit non-traditionally. Sometimes it works, sometimes it doesn't.

You probably know already that when you work on your own projects you are intimately familiar with them and likely take a lot of information for granted and forget the viewer may not know any of it and could be left confused. I try to keep that in mind, but I think as long as you make sure at some point you give the viewer the information needed, like a change of location, it should be fine. Unless of course, you are doing it t confuse or misdirect the viewer.

I would have loved to spend another day or so shooting this film and gotten everything I wanted, but that's low budget filmmaking for you.

Thanks again. It means a lot.
 
You probably know already that when you work on your own projects you are intimately familiar with them and likely take a lot of information for granted and forget the viewer may not know any of it and could be left confused.

Yup, I absolutely agree. That's why I always show the rough cut to as many people as I can to get feedback.

While I certainly don't use all of the suggestions/feedback - plenty of people contradict each other - I do look for areas where multiple people have the same questions or concerns.
 
Yup, I absolutely agree. That's why I always show the rough cut to as many people as I can to get feedback.

While I certainly don't use all of the suggestions/feedback - plenty of people contradict each other - I do look for areas where multiple people have the same questions or concerns.

It' been my exact same philosophy for a long time now. 👍
 
This can happen with dialogue as well. You know all the words so can hear/understand them but to someone else parts may be unintelligible.
 
This can happen with dialogue as well. You know all the words so can hear/understand them but to someone else parts may be unintelligible.

Right, which is why you really never know what kind of response you will have. Even big-budget studio movies that were well received at test audiences sometimes bomb to a wider audience and vice versa. I have sorta adopted a philosophy when it comes to my writing and directing to not spell every single thing out, but leave some up for discussion and interpretation. Whether it is successful is another story 😉
 
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