I liked it. It made me jump a couple times. It was really cheesy though; the editing kind of overdid some stuff; ie: When the phone went dead; you didn't have to show him pulling the line. But overall, really enjoyable.
I started out exactly where you are now about a year ago. You have a LOT of stuff to work on, but its a great first step toward becoming better. I hope you keep practicing and no matter what anyone says you keep having fun doing what your doing.