1. As said, there are way too many flashbacks for first like 3 or 4 pages. On the second flashback I already felt lost.
2. The scenes have too many words, like in a novel. It is not cinematic description at all, doesn't read like a script. Repetitive description of blue eyes (how many times we have to read the woman has blue eyes?) is just one example. What is about the upper cases appearing without any special meaning (like FERRY - ferry, so what?)
3. Seems like a ghost story but already lost in flashbacks, could not even finish third page.
4. Generally, I don't get the story at all, doesn't seem emotional and very forced.