watch ''Let Go'' Short Film

[MauroMudkipz]

So this is my latest work. The audio is in portuguese, but i atempted to put english subtitles so everyone can see it, but i'm sorry if they're not grammatically correct. Oh and yeah, yeah, i know, i quoted J.K. Rowling ahah. What would you guys change?

https://vimeo.com/45533591

 

[MauroMudkipz]

nobody...? come on guys :b

 

[mus]

i've noticed that nobody really wants to leave feedback on other people's work on this forum... anyway, I thought the short was fantastic... excellent lighting... composition... the actors did well... and i usually don't watch anything foreign, as i hate reading subtitles, but this was great!

 

[MauroMudkipz]

thank you so much, really!

 

[Zensteve]

Acting's flat
Audio's dodgy (and that shovel from 2:00 to 3:10-ish?)
Color grading is green. Really really green.
Blown-out highlights
Lens needs cleaning, btw

The reveal at 4:30-ish was quite well done. Simple but effective technique.

I've seen this film hundreds of times before. It's a very common theme for young first-time filmmakers. Difficult to make one stand out.

What's next?

 

[scriptalicious]

I agree with zensteve, audio does need some work, but i quite liked the blown out highlights - there is a subtitle that is at 3.31 'teared' I think it should be 'tore' little thing.

A good start point for me, take the advice and just clean it up a bit.

Also liked the reveal and i did like the use of the train as the crux of the story.

good job.

 

[MauroMudkipz]

thank you so much, i'll take your advices, i'm working on a new short right now