archived-videos Las Vegas Retail Commercial Need Feedback

[RichGriff]

Hello all,

I am a commercial film maker in LAs Vegas, NV. I have created this work for a local company to advertise a car wash. All technical criticism is welcome!

Thanks,

Richie

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lp-ajmp8xhU

 

[indietalk]

 

[indietalk]

Commercial looks good!
1. I thought the "Car Wash Plan" graphic was washed out against background.
2. I didn't understand the company's name (not your problem).

But looks good and message delivered.

 

[Sweetie]

It's good.

The grade on the pan up though....