I guess I'm doing the Script Frenzy ish.
After about a year of mulling over one premise, I figured it's time to start raising this puppy.
It's going better than I thought it would.
The problem is that I feel what I have now is too short compared to all the substance that I've worked hard on, but that may be a good thing. I think of it being longer on screen that on paper.
Also, I'm debating whether the title should be Jaw(a reference to the Native American act of fashioning a tomahawk out of a horse jaw) or Javelina(a Southwest American-native pig-like creature common in the American deserts).
I'd appreciate the read, plus a criticism on dialogue and character development, which I've been focusing on.
http://crocodoc.com/sKpla4A
Plus which title you prefer. I'd benefit from that.
Danke.
After about a year of mulling over one premise, I figured it's time to start raising this puppy.
It's going better than I thought it would.
The problem is that I feel what I have now is too short compared to all the substance that I've worked hard on, but that may be a good thing. I think of it being longer on screen that on paper.
Also, I'm debating whether the title should be Jaw(a reference to the Native American act of fashioning a tomahawk out of a horse jaw) or Javelina(a Southwest American-native pig-like creature common in the American deserts).
I'd appreciate the read, plus a criticism on dialogue and character development, which I've been focusing on.
http://crocodoc.com/sKpla4A
Plus which title you prefer. I'd benefit from that.
Danke.
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