Is this good copy to sell our movie idea?

Hey everyone,

Not entirely sure if this is where I should be posting this, but I was wondering if you guys could critique this copy I made to promote a mini-series my brother and I are working on. The idea is to create a launch site where they can view this promo: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yCyfEsH8iSE

After that, if they scroll further down the launch site, they can read this:

Welcome to Ionia Media’s latest sci-fi thriller. Novek is like no other. A mind-bending mini-series set in present-day, follow four characters as they try to survive this surreal and un-expecting phenomenon that has everyone wondering if this is the end of the Universe. Structured like the film, “Pulp Fiction” but with the cerebral feel you get from a Phillip K. Dick novel, the Firman Brothers have passionately spent two years crafting this paradigmal tale that unravels into an amazing larger-than-life twist. It is sure to leave you wondering what else lies beyond our reality. So, check us out and be sure to follow us on Twitter and Facebook as we venture on a journey to bring you this unforgettable story.

Then they can watch the behind the scenes promo: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CUNxBkE0WNI&feature=youtu.be

I'm just wondering if this is a good way to introduce the mini-series. Here's what the launch site looks like: Ioniamedia.com/novek.

Its still being built so it's not fully done but I just wanted to give you guys a sense of what we're trying to create. Do you guys think others would want to invest in this idea via kickstarter?
 
Four friends navigate the increasingly impending end of the Earth due to a recently discovered extra-terrestrial doom. Will an ambiguous and anonymous message save them or just provide false hope until the ugly end?

i didn't watch, just read the thread, but i like doing loglines haha

any closer?

That's not bad, though none of them are friends.
 
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