Bigger guy, great acting. Smaller guy was meh, but decent.
your Director of Photography/camera operator is terrible. (if you are the one behind the camera, no offense)
The editing was rather poor.
The lighting was purely ambient, and you chose bad location for ambient light. You need lights, badly.
There are multiple occasions where you can hear things interacting with the body of the camera reverbarating(spelling) on the camera mic.
The chase scene and the cuts/cinematography were really bad.
Is there any music? Do you have a composer? You could also use some overimposed sound effects for the weapon firing and striking the guy on the ground.
All that negativity being said, I think you have a lot of potential.
You created something.
You orchestrated a production, so you have managing skills.
You got a lot of work ahead of you though.
If you would be interested in any collabs, I think we could make a good crew, as I am highly proficient in most of the areas you are lacking.
cheers.
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