archived-videos Hobo Vengeance: First Short Film

[Baldrick]

Just looking for any sort of feedback (Positive or Negative, I don't mind )

Basically, we were given a very basic idea to go and make a short film, and developed, an admittedly negligible plot in the space of about 10 minutes..

So any sort of feedback (Here OR on Youtube) on camera work, make up, acting, or just general all round decent-ness would be greatly appreciated.
And we ARE aware of the dismal lack of dialogue...

Video:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=n2Tc0DOxtLQ

Youtube Channel:
http://www.youtube.com/user/HoboBruceProductions

Thanks

 

[Murdock]

There is very little dialogue, but you will find that with a good story dialogue is not always necessary if the execution is good. However when there is dialogue, we need to hear it. I couldn't hear any of the dialogue in this film. Also the story was really loose, with a lot of gaps in the story. I enjoyed it, but it could really use some work.

 

[Baldrick]

Thanks for the reply

Yeah, we weren't intending to make it anywhere near as long, or even story based, as it turned out. But we just kept evolving the story on the spot.
To us it made sense, but once we got to editing we realised a lot of mistakes.

Needless to say, we're scripting our next production