Hi all,
I'm a second year film student, and one of our main projects this year is to write, direct and produce our own short films (arghh!). Every week in workshops we are set a new task to help with development, so concepts, treatments, etc and it goes on.
I'm currently working on a treatment, but I'm really struggling now with the "middle" of my story. The story has a purpose and a point but I feel like every way I try and turn with it I'm struggling.
Essentially, it is this:
A young boy (6-8 years old), notices that his father keeps coming home late at night, and decides to investigate.
The real "crux" of the story, as it were is to communicate the young boy's dedication and unwavering belief in his father. While the audience (as adults) get clues that appear to suggest the father character is having an affair, the young boy instead imagines that his father is doing something amazing - he is secretly a super hero, or a secret agent etc.
The boy carries out his investigation and eventually the mother steps in to see what he's doing, where SHE discovers what the husband has been up to from what the boy has found. She takes the boy and goes to the place that the father has been spending all his nights without her - a lonely fast food job he's had to take (either as a second job or because he's lost his actual job, I can't decide yet) to pay the bills, and has been too ashamed to tell her.
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First of all - any feedback on the actual story in terms of a short film/in general? I feel like I could write it well as it contains a lot of elements of things I have personally experienced, sort of wrapped up in a different story. However, I keep hitting a wall, logistically with writing it. I have the beginning and the end down and know exactly where I want to be with them, but I'm struggling with the actual "investigation" part of it.
I want this to be quite light and comic, but at the same time have a purpose in revealing the story. But logistically, it's sort of difficult to have a 6-8 year old follow his father around for "clues", as realistically he would be seen, and his mother would realise he was gone.
Can anyone help here? I'm really lost, and the main crux of the story is something I really really want to tell, but I've sort of painted myself in to a corner.
Thanks in advance"
I'm a second year film student, and one of our main projects this year is to write, direct and produce our own short films (arghh!). Every week in workshops we are set a new task to help with development, so concepts, treatments, etc and it goes on.
I'm currently working on a treatment, but I'm really struggling now with the "middle" of my story. The story has a purpose and a point but I feel like every way I try and turn with it I'm struggling.
Essentially, it is this:
A young boy (6-8 years old), notices that his father keeps coming home late at night, and decides to investigate.
The real "crux" of the story, as it were is to communicate the young boy's dedication and unwavering belief in his father. While the audience (as adults) get clues that appear to suggest the father character is having an affair, the young boy instead imagines that his father is doing something amazing - he is secretly a super hero, or a secret agent etc.
The boy carries out his investigation and eventually the mother steps in to see what he's doing, where SHE discovers what the husband has been up to from what the boy has found. She takes the boy and goes to the place that the father has been spending all his nights without her - a lonely fast food job he's had to take (either as a second job or because he's lost his actual job, I can't decide yet) to pay the bills, and has been too ashamed to tell her.
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First of all - any feedback on the actual story in terms of a short film/in general? I feel like I could write it well as it contains a lot of elements of things I have personally experienced, sort of wrapped up in a different story. However, I keep hitting a wall, logistically with writing it. I have the beginning and the end down and know exactly where I want to be with them, but I'm struggling with the actual "investigation" part of it.
I want this to be quite light and comic, but at the same time have a purpose in revealing the story. But logistically, it's sort of difficult to have a 6-8 year old follow his father around for "clues", as realistically he would be seen, and his mother would realise he was gone.
Can anyone help here? I'm really lost, and the main crux of the story is something I really really want to tell, but I've sort of painted myself in to a corner.
Thanks in advance"
