This is a 4-page scene from my current WIP.
Genre: Fantasy/Horror
Brief Context: The archangel Uriel has manifest in the body of a young woman with amnesia. She's recovered parts of her memory and confronts her nemesis, the demon Dantalion, who has kidnapped the young man who found her, and who she has reluctantly fallen in love with.
My intention is to make the scene surreal without it being pretentious or stilted. It's difficult writing a conversation between an archangel and the Grand Duke of Hell. I'd like feedback on whether the tone of the scene does its job or if it's unintentionally comedic or, worse, melodramatic and boring.
Muchos gracias, amigos!
-Charles
http://www.politikonzoon.com/Uriel scene 27.pdf
Genre: Fantasy/Horror
Brief Context: The archangel Uriel has manifest in the body of a young woman with amnesia. She's recovered parts of her memory and confronts her nemesis, the demon Dantalion, who has kidnapped the young man who found her, and who she has reluctantly fallen in love with.
My intention is to make the scene surreal without it being pretentious or stilted. It's difficult writing a conversation between an archangel and the Grand Duke of Hell. I'd like feedback on whether the tone of the scene does its job or if it's unintentionally comedic or, worse, melodramatic and boring.
Muchos gracias, amigos!
-Charles
http://www.politikonzoon.com/Uriel scene 27.pdf