Feedback Request - Family Guy Spec Script

[Rodney]

Any notes would be very helpful. Thanks.

https://www.scribd.com/doc/274349216/Family-Guy

 

[maz]

My main criticism of it would be that spec scripts should follow the format of the show they're speccing, and Family Guy always uses A-story/B-story (and C-story?) structure. Part of the challenge and the art of half-hour sitcom writing is juggling two or three stories in that limited time - the other characters get too little to do in this script.

 

[RationalScreenwriter]

Also, to add to 'maz's comment, the script should not be locked-up on a site that requires a Membership after 2-weeks. Find another hosting website.

 

[Rodney]

My main criticism of it would be that spec scripts should follow the format of the show they're speccing, and Family Guy always uses A-story/B-story (and C-story?) structure. Part of the challenge and the art of half-hour sitcom writing is juggling two or three stories in that limited time - the other characters get too little to do in this script.

About half of Family Guy's episodes have one plot.

 

[Rodney]

Also, to add to 'maz's comment, the script should not be locked-up on a site that requires a Membership after 2-weeks. Find another hosting website.

You don't need to be a member of Scribd to read my document.

 

[maz]

About half of Family Guy's episodes have one plot.

I can't say I've watched them all, but we generally get two or three episodes a night over here, and it's often on just in the background while I work. I can't remember a single episode where the entire episode focused on one character. Not one plot, but one character.

You're probably right, though, and I just haven't endured enough Family Guy