I didn't poop my pants, either.
I mighta just... nevermind.
Lettuce begin with:
"The foreign exchange student Amber comes home to find the living room in a complete state of
dishevel. "
dishevelment is the word you're looking for.
http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/dishevelment
That she's a "foreign exchange student" is immaterial to the story, so drop that term and begin the sentence simply with "A young woman comes home...".
The opening 360° was... less than elegant.
That jarring jump edit @ 0:28, yeah. You need a cross fade there.
Seriously, my favorite bit of camera work I actually did appreciate was the docudrama bit from 0:55 to 1:04.
My least favorite was the "A$$ Cam" from 1:56 to 2:02. I'm sure IRL it's a lovely a$$,
butt I don't think it makes for a good part of a horror story.
@ 2:06 that key shot is visual exposition. Great for late night infomercials. Not so great for cinema magnifique.
I REALLY like your "night time" shots from 2:57 to 3:26. How did you do that? Day for night, alter in post?
Okey doke, then... !
Work on developing your actual story and I'll look forward to your next short!