Hey there,
So I'll preface this by saying that this for class, and the assignment guidelines don't really suit the stories I usually write (even though I don't consider myself a writer). We've also only had a few days to do the assignment. That's fine, that's part of the challenge - I'm just saying I know this isn't my finest work by any stretch of imagination.
Anywho, the script has to be:
- "realistic,"
- non-genre (basically drama and comedy are fine)
- shootable on no budget
- 5 pages or under
- adhering to the three act structure.
We were given a breakdown of the three act structure, which I can't find an exact description of online, though I'm sure you're all familiar with similar plot points and breakdowns. It may be the tutor's own breakdown. Anyway, it goes:
-Uneasy Equilibrium (suggestion that things aren't quite right for protag)
-Inciting Incident
-Refusal of the Call (protag refusing to engage with conflict)
-First Turning point (starting second act)
-Mid Point
-Second Act Turning Point
-Climax
Regardless of whether this is a good approach to 3-act structure (I don't think it's bad, but it's not amazing imo), it needs to follow this.
My first two concepts were rejected for 1) being unrealistic, 2) the protagonist being too goal-less (even though that's what I was trying to do). So the script does have to be pretty conventional.
Anyway, here's my rough draft. I don't have a heap of time to refine it, so I though I'd post it here for some quick feedback. Is the first act a little long? Does the protag have clear goals that we care about? Any structural or formatting issues? etc
https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B1cA66qv8T4WWFh6c19MbV92WGc/edit?usp=sharing
So I'll preface this by saying that this for class, and the assignment guidelines don't really suit the stories I usually write (even though I don't consider myself a writer). We've also only had a few days to do the assignment. That's fine, that's part of the challenge - I'm just saying I know this isn't my finest work by any stretch of imagination.
Anywho, the script has to be:
- "realistic,"
- non-genre (basically drama and comedy are fine)
- shootable on no budget
- 5 pages or under
- adhering to the three act structure.
We were given a breakdown of the three act structure, which I can't find an exact description of online, though I'm sure you're all familiar with similar plot points and breakdowns. It may be the tutor's own breakdown. Anyway, it goes:
-Uneasy Equilibrium (suggestion that things aren't quite right for protag)
-Inciting Incident
-Refusal of the Call (protag refusing to engage with conflict)
-First Turning point (starting second act)
-Mid Point
-Second Act Turning Point
-Climax
Regardless of whether this is a good approach to 3-act structure (I don't think it's bad, but it's not amazing imo), it needs to follow this.
My first two concepts were rejected for 1) being unrealistic, 2) the protagonist being too goal-less (even though that's what I was trying to do). So the script does have to be pretty conventional.
Anyway, here's my rough draft. I don't have a heap of time to refine it, so I though I'd post it here for some quick feedback. Is the first act a little long? Does the protag have clear goals that we care about? Any structural or formatting issues? etc
https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B1cA66qv8T4WWFh6c19MbV92WGc/edit?usp=sharing
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